How does one write (or me telling the story of how I've learned writing)

Error Knigts Pt. 2

Ah yes, the second volume

I can tell you ONE thing that I know for sure.
The cover was Ota carrying a passed out Laky in a way I thought was epic.

But let's not focus on the cover and plunge directly into the interesting part.

I'm pretty sure that the volume starts with Laky waking up on the carpet (because Ota decided that he would leave her to die on the carpet ig) because Gappy kept yelling next to her because of course that's what you do when someone is passed out next to you. But I mean, Gappy is the annoying mascot so he isn't supposed to be smart, just to be cute (which he isn't his design is awful).

I'm not sure what happens next tbh. From what I remember, Laky then leaves the house to search for Ota and maybe find Heiry cause it just hit her that she hasn't seen her since she arrived in this place and she's kinda worried for her.

She ends up on the village square and there she spots Ota, she goes to talk to him but before she can tell him anything, a girl in a cloak and a longass ponytail run out of nowhere and tells Ota that, in the village close, there is a person that they took in a few days ago who's now beating the shit out of everyone and they need help. Ota asks what her name is and the girl answers Heiry. Laky says that's her friend (which is the worst move that she could have made) and the girl offers to bring her to the village because she is dumb af I guess.

And after that my parents lost the book.

Do you know what the moral of the story is ?

Give your stories stakes.

The biggest problem with Errors Knigts is that, besides the really poor storyline and art, the story doesn't have any stakes. For example, Laky wanted to find Heiry in the first volume and she finds her litterally at the beginning of the next volume.

Give your stories stakes.