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The title explains it all.
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I'll read a book (5 chapters ), and write a review...
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A blurb is supposed to be short, and intriguing enough for the readers to click on your book and read it.
If it is too long the readers may get bored and lose interest.
Your blurb on the other hand is short but not exactly intriguing.
Firstly, you gave an introduction of the characters (which in this case is the grieving psychotic parent ) that's good ✅
Secondly, the book's main conflict (which is their dead son)✅
Then, the blurb should show how the stakes will rise. (they need their son alive, so like the psychotic parent they are they use a person as a vessel)✅
Then lastly finish with the appeal of the readers.
You have the idea of the blurb but I think it's the way you worded it, add a little something to the blurb, like asking a rhetorical question, or saying an eerie phrase.
Perhaps if you said something like...
" Two grieving psychotic parents lost their son by an unfortunate event. But they found a way to revive him, and all they need is a vessel.
After all, Is it so psychotic to want their son back? They can finally get a second chance "
I hope you understand!
The Book Cover
* It's a nice, and simple cover, the hands reaching out from the darkness gave an eerie feeling... This is good considering the Genre of the book, and let's not forget the title of your book. It's short, simple, diverse, and doesn't give away the entire storyline (eg My girlfriend stole my bra, or I'm trapped in a basement with a serial killer) I've seen books here that has it.
* I like the fact that your book stands out in terms of the title which is what every author needs to make their book work.
Here comes the but part :(
But... Your cover doesn't feel... complete, Yes it has a cover (obviously), and Yes the title is good but the way it's placed needs to feel professional.
Exhibit A 👇🏾
Take a look at this:
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* For it to feel more professional add your name (not necessarily your real one) at the top, left, or right corner of the cover, and let it be visible.
* The main title should grab the reader's attention by making it, clear and centered like the example above
* a sub-title is optional, but it will add a nice touch to it.
Remember the book cover is always important if you want to captivate the readers. In this case, the readers judge a book by its cover.
Moving on...
The Intro of the book
* The first few sentences of your book drew me in, left me wondering, and left me curious enough to keep reading. So, a point goes to you.
*Your use of Idoms and figure of speech made the book descriptive and vivid. As you should!
The plot
* In chapters 2-3: We're getting an insight into the main character and why, and how they're in the predicament they are in. You're slowly giving us input on the book but not so much that we already know what comes next. Just enough information to want to know what happens. Which is very good if you want to keep your readers interested!
* Now, in chapters 4-5: As we keep reading we are getting some momentum on the plot, and also getting a little more details of what's going on. I was able to bond more with the characters, although they ain't perfect but ain't we all?
* Now the only thing I like better than a good plot is a good plot twist. Damn!
I almost didn't see it coming. Not bad.
* The plot in general was well-written and planned out.
* The Dialogue (the interaction between characters) was smooth. They didn't feel stiff or unnatural (like robots). You not only showed their emotions but you made the readers feel them too.
Writing style
I can see you've already found a style of writing that suits you and the story.
Overall
Honestly so far this book has been quite enjoyable. The captivating storyline, plot, plot twist, and comedy relief XD
Keep up the good work. The only thing you need to perfect is the blurb and the Book cover.
