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The title explains it all.
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I'll read a book (5 chapters ), and write a review...
I like the book cover, it's very appropriate for a romance book (it has all the right things you need in a book cover), but for a romantic thriller, I'm not sure. But it's good nevertheless!
The Blurb
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* Hmmm, I'm not sure what to say, it's acting more like a summary than a blurb. The details you gave are a bit much!
* A blub is meant to act as a short, a bit vague description of the book
* If you end up telling the readers those kinds of details, then the readers won't see the point in reading the main book, and that's the last thing we want!
* So, I suggest you find a way to keep the blurb as short, and simple, but intriguing as possible <3 (I prefer the blurb you wrote when you were applying for the book review.)
The intro of the book
We're starting at a good pace at the beginning of the book, the protagonist is telling the reader about their father not picking up his calls after going missing. Sometimes I prefer you show the readers than just tell, or instead of telling the readers the protagonist called why not create a dialogue of how the conversation went?
Let me explain further!
Example 1: In the beginning, the protagonist said they felt restless but they didn't show it.
There are many ways to convey the protagonist's restlessness/uneasiness without the need for the character to say it.
Like:
* Biting of nails/ lips.
* continuous taping your fingers on a table
* A running heartbeat
* A sick sensation in their stomach, and many more.
It makes the characters feel a little more real, hope you get it.
Next!
The plot: the storyline
* We have chapters 2-3: So far there hasn't been any growth in the plot-line.
* The storylines in the first and third chapters (both titled 'the stubborn taxi driver') seem to be similar. I don't know if that's a mistake. It feels like I'm going in circles LOL.
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I have a screenshot of the same title in both one and three.
* In chapters 4-5: the storyline is now starting to pick up
its momentum, The protagonist's journey to find their missing father hasn't been easy as they faced many, many, MANY challenges on their way but in the process managed to find friends who are willing to help them in their seemingly impossible mission.
Writing style
* You have a basic writing style. Simple enough for the readers to understand, but not strong enough to keep the readers... Well, reading, that can't be good! Some readers may get bored easily with your type of writing style.
* But don't worry practice makes perfect. I suggest whenever your reading a book (especially a well-written and popular book) take notes on the author's style of writing and find out what made you keep reading it, is it the dialogue? The use of the figure of speech? And so on.
Overall
A pretty good book, although there is room for improvement, with a few grammatical mistakes here and there which can easily be solved by going through your book and editing it.
I believe once you can improve your writing style your book will be even better than you had imagined!
* You mainly need to work on the characters showing their emotions instead of saying them!
