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Thank you so much for participating in the awards. The entries all had something truly unique or special about them. However, there can only be one winner and just like a good steak, our judges must trim the fat.
Below, are the second round results for Action/Adventure and Thriller/Suspense.
Good luck to those continuing and thank you for your efforts to those who didn't make it through.
Racing Hearts Artemis_223 Character/s Introduction: 7/10 Genre Fit: 5/10 Grammar/Mechanics: 8/10 Details: 7/10 Total: 27/40 Though I'm not including it in the review, I'd like to point out both the cover and the character art in the book. Both are beautiful! I appreciate the time that the author spent on these details.
Watch the use of "She" at the beginning of sentences. Using the same sentence structure continually can take away from the reader's enjoyment. Overall, mechanics were good. The biggest problem was with comma usage. Sometimes, they were used where they were not needed, and other times, they were missed. "He was strikingly handsome and his chiseled jawline..." These are two independent clause (or would be, if I finished typing the sentence out here), and therefore a comma needs to be used before the "and." Present participles were very, very overused (I struggled with this myself). If you do not know what a present participle is, I'll underline the example here that I took from your book: "the girl said, extending her hand." I suggest that the author read through their writing while looking for these participles. Moving some to the beginning of the sentence, instead of tacking them on the end would help to vary sentence structure a bit.
The writing and detail in the book are good. Perhaps my biggest gripe is that the trope from the very beginning is a common one, and seems more befitting the romance category than anything else. I can perhaps see some action and adventure themes, but it's pretty much a romance. Maybe in later chapters, another genre takes over, but from what I read, I cannot score it a 10/10 for Genre Fit. I think the book deserves a higher score than I gave it, but I need to keep my scoring as similar as possible while judging, and so the Genre Fit is going to bring the score down a bit.
Details were good, though I urge the writer to watch the overuse of certain descriptions, such as voice. There seems to be a focus on dialogue (again, this is something I do because dialogue seems easier to write than other things), but that's alright so long as the writer can keep conversations and the nonverbals that go along with them unique.
Overall, this was an enjoyable read. Thanks for allowing me to review! It was an honor!
Black or White DeathBlade__ Character/s Introduction: 8/10 Genre Fit: 10/10 Grammar/Mechanics: 7/10 Details: 7/10 Total: 32/40 The gravity of the situation in the beginning of the book is nicely done! One can just feel the tension. As mentioned last round, there are some problems with sentence structure at times, but overall, the prologue serves as a great beginning for a thriller novel. There is a lot of potential for character growth and development.
