Coast - Reader x Luffy

CHAPTER FIFTEEN

So I kinda' get the vibe that the prologue is not very good in this story. It doesn't have as much interaction as the other chapters do; so I was wondering if I could get an opinion on it?

Like, what were your initial thoughts while reading and how did it set up your expectations for the story? Something like that, if somebody is kind enough to share.

Depending on the consensus maybe I'll give it a bit of a revamp; since it was written a long-ass time ago and my writing is a bit different now.

(FYI, this chappy is a lil short because I'm on vacation and only have so much time to update, but I need to feed you guys, so it's snack time!)

Big thanks if you reply, happy reading :)

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It wasn't long after dealing with various sky-lampreys that we came across a huge ornate statue containing multiple holes that served as entrances; It was some sort of gate, labeled with different ordeals, as the white beret's had mentioned we would ultimately have to face during their attempt to arrest us earlier.

After a long, fearful debate on choosing between our options (ordeal of swamp, ordeal of iron, ordeal of strings, and ordeal of balls); the crewmates chose balls, in the end. According to Usopp's logic, it sounded the least harmful out of all the names listed. In Luffy's words, it sounded the most fun. Sanji didn't think any of them sounded very dangerous at all. However, all of them sounded equally scary to me, considering the fact that this whole island was trying to kill us anyways, so I just agreed with the others and had to hope for the best.

The tunnel was long, and dark; the current's speed picking up as if we were going through a water slide or something. It was tense, to say the least, as Luffy came up with theories of what would happen to us once we reached the exit, scaring the wits out of Usopp and I. He was going on and on about how 'maybe we would fall ten-thousand meters, back into the blue sea!' I had been the only one paying attention when we did finally reach the exit, and my throat constricted before I could warn them of the impending danger.

I can only remember reaching to grab Luffy's arm tight, before my stomach lurched, and gravity pulled us down; after all, the end of the tunnel had led to a waterfall, lifted hundreds of feet in the air.

All of us screamed in unison, unsure for our lives as the only thing that we could see below us were clouds gliding through the air. Would we fall through them, and back to the blue sea, like Luffy predicted? Would we hit another island and smash to pieces? I closed my eyes, refusing to let Luffy go as everyone lost their minds.

We plummeted through the mist, losing visibility for a majority of the free-fall, and putting us into further panic. Then, the view was cleared, and--

Boing!

The Crow landed in a flurry of the milky road, the watery substance exploding out and up from below the boat, softening our crash-landing. Luffy nearly fell overboard when we did, but my hold was unyielding, and I managed to pull him back on board with a harsh tug.

Panting heavily, I felt him laughing hysterically against my back, before releasing me as he sat up. Was he a psychopath or something?

"That was scary! I thought we were going to die!" He cackles some more, even as Sanji kicks at his smiling head and scolds the boy for scaring us so badly beforehand.

"Ugh, whatever." Sanji lights a cigarette after his other one was lost in the drop, "So, what is this place?"

I lift myself from the floorboards slowly as everyone shifts to observe our new surroundings; instead of standing, I scooch back against the mast of the umbrella, staying seated in the shade. Then, I take a look as well.