a/n: specifically my own recap a year later of this manuscript. basically a review and notes on old writing/how to improve and to compare current writing to this baby.
- unrealistic as fuck: her dad's an ass but is always switching sides (being her dad/not)
- random character personalities: specifically mer and jj, often jj's described as a hyper kid, then gets serious around her. when sarah's like see ur dad even tho her dad (ward) is an ass??
- WHYS: why is her dad an ass????????!!
- mostly summerization of scenes, tho skips over obx plot and goes into romance plot, still too short needs detail
- often scenes have no visual description of setting
- never fully concludes 'theory's' or 'concept's
- pope was fine with being played with
- too much repetition of wording "yelled" or "shouted"
- very surface level stuff: SHOW not tell, instead allow readers to slowly figure shit out
- and finally UNCOMPLETED
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FanfictionMercedes Shoupe hated all Pogues, especially JJ Maybanks. They were always up to no good, stealing, thieving, vandalizing, the list went on and on. And JJ Maybanks was the absolute worst out of all of them; he went beyond trouble maker. He was the d...
