Fantasy Writing Critic, Review and Simplified Guide

Review for Ang Gintong Panulat by MeasMrNiceGuy

TItle: Ang GIntong Panulat

Author: 

Summary:

The story starts with a very relatable character. Condor, who was not born of wealth and raised in a slump area. He manages to survive by digging a trash pile and snatching. But he wishes to change his life and promises his mother to give them a better shelter. 

The adventure begins with his encounter with the golden pen. The golden pen creates a magical portal (imagine Dr. Strange portal for added visual effects) that brings Condor back to the past, and so the (mis)adventure begins.

Strength:

For the Main Character, Condor was introduced well, even with unfavorable situation in life, he still dreams of having a better one. All throughout the story, he was curious and very interesting to read type of character.

For the Plot and setting, starting with the slump area then transported to the past, pacing became interesting when Condor started meeting some mysterious characters including the national hero Rizal. Too many events that will lead the reader curious of what will happen next, and where he could be next.

As for the Writing Style, I've known Measmrniceguy for a long time and read some of his previous stories. The writing approach is very realistic and made interesting when the fantasy part enters the scene. Every chapter is a cliffhanger, or at least will make you want to continue and find out what happens next to the story. This is not lip service, just my observation.

Areas for Improvement:

If I am not mistaken, this story is either still in draft mode since the story is not yet finished, there are a lot

of typos to clean, and a few missed punctuations, but this is forgivable if it will be rechecked and corrected(with at least 1 round of QA).No correction feedback for the actual story, plot or characters.

Final Thoughts

Ang Gintong Panulat, overall, is a very enjoyable to read story. As mentioned, I would only read 3-5 chapters. But if the story hooks me, I will continue reading up to the end. which I did, waiting for the next jump or character, which Condor will meet along the story. 

Scenes are very well detailed, right questions and problems are in place for the main character to keeps the story interesting.

Pacing was just right, interest builds up as the story progress, I hope there would be a concluding chapter for this story.

Good job Measmrniceguy!