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Review for Dragonier by lilshadowwolf

Title: Dragonier

Author: lilshadowwolf

Summary:

A life on the move involves finding and hunting dragons— This is the life of a Dragoniers.

Young Zion was left by his father, who left only a note for him to read. Years have passed, and when the Dragoniers visited their town again, Zion decided to leave and join them. Thus, his (mis)adventure begins.

Strengths:

Each chapter closely reflects its title, giving the reader a clear idea of what the chapter is about, almost as if I were reading a real fantasy book.

As for the main character, he has the perfect motivation to leave town and embark on his journey to find his father.

The pacing is suited for a full-length book, with each chapter providing enough detail to explain scenes and events.

The character conflicts and interactions are vividly described and believable.

For Improvement:

I already mentioned in the chapter comments some minor improvements that would be nice to have, but these were just suggestions. Keep them if they fit your writing style.

Please do a quick recheck to correct any missing punctuation.

Another minor suggestion: In the first few chapters, consider adding more internal thoughts and reactions from Zion so that readers remain attached to the main character, especially when interactions with other characters begin.

Final thoughts

In the first few chapters, I was already intrigued by the path Zion is taking. It promises to be an exciting adventure, especially with the fellow Dragoniers who have diverse manners and traits.

I tried not to refer to or read "Drifting Dragons" to avoid comparisons in the early chapters.

You have a vivid imagination to create this story, and I hope you continue to share it. I enjoyed reading it and will continue to follow Zion's journey.

Keep writing!