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Short Review
Plot: So far only two chapters are available. The first chapter is captivating because you started by explaining Lisa's mother and Kim Daehyun's relationship. It seems like you have planned the storyline very well, and I'm excited to see the development of Taehyung and Lisa's sibling bond and learn more about their past. For the second chapter, I can't wait to see where the story is headed after Jungkook and Jimin's arrival. I have a feeling that something huge is coming.
Descriptions: I noticed your way of describing scenes in this book differs from your other works, is that right? The descriptions are simple with a purpose to keep the story going, which is not bad, but I would advise you to let the scenes linger a little longer. However, the first two chapters are mainly focused on introducing the characters, so it's fine.
Although I have not included the grammar section, I would advise you to be mindful of the use of commas.
Characters: As for the characters, Taehyung's the most intriguing one for me. I want to see his reasoning behind everything. Lisa's 'POV' is fun to read and easy to connect with. She has strong opinions and isn't afraid to follow her heart, which makes her character very likable. I'm yet to get a good comprehension of Jungkook's character, but hopefully, we'll see more of him in future updates.
Title & Cover: The title is attractive and holds meaning to the story, and I'd say the cover goes well with the aesthetic.
Overall, as I said above, there are only two chapters, but the story seems original and new. I could not find anything that bothered my reading experience. The characters' interactions and their dialogues were funny and enjoyable. I squealed in excitement when I spotted Hoseok and Jimin. I was not expecting to find them there. Well, I will be looking forward to the next chapters. All the best!
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