Everything wrong with Chapter 1: Here we go...

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Yawn! A new day! I can finally meet my new team! I can't be live they accepted me. ME!I better get ready.I had already picked up my team uniform but I still needed some new kicks.
New kicks. Seriously who even says that anymore?

I started to look around.I really liked a pair of slip ons ,but WAY out of my price range.
I didn't know inklings had budgets.

Well Well Well,If it isn't Ms. Aquaria.
Sea-related pun.

They all waved in perfect synchronization. Cute but weird.
1 sin off because I agree with Ana. It is cute but weird.
That sin comes back because perfect synchronization is almost nonexistent.

It's okay, Jellyfish.
Another sea-related pun.

I heard Aaliyah say to me in a kind and understanding manor to me
How is a manor kind and understanding? Confused Scratch is confused.

The finest Lattes for everyone!And don't forget the PANCAKES!"
1 sin off because pancakes.

Callie and Marie
From this point on, all sea-related puns are worth 2 sins. If you guys can't notice, Callie, Marie, CallieMarie, kalimari (as in the food)

Stay Fresh!
1 sin off because Stay Fresh. (That's what Mountain Dew does to me)

I've never seen such a low lever do such amazing planning!
We're gonna need a short person. (Reread if you don't get the joke)

I climbed up to the mid tower when I bumped into someone. I looked up to see it wasn't a Orange Inker. But a Bravest Blue.
So splat their inkling butts!

My grip was starting to slip. His eyes wide. Just staring at me. He was super cute though.
Super cute?!? I don't care, splat him!!!

"Need a hand?" He asked me
Romeo and Juliet, a girl from a team in love with a guy from an enemy team. Fun fact: this stuff makes me turn into Displeased Scratch. In other words, displeased Scratch is displeased.

I thought I dropped something on the way though,but it was probably just the ink.
1 sin off for foreshadowing. I like that in a story.

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Sin Count: 8
Sin: Dropping Something (I thought I dropped something on the way...)

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So guys, that's the first chapter of An Inkling's Love Story down, some more to go.

*reads next chapter*

Well... This explains everything... We're gonna have some problems. Anyway, keep spinning those records! Scratch out!

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