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Wires and Strings

Book: Wires and Strings

Author: @LittleMissYehet

Cover: 7/10

Plot: 9/10
• original and enjoyable!

Summary: 7/10

Characters: 8/10
• I like the boy's characteristics and Linrae's background

Score: 31/40

Kookies:
Your writing is enjoyable and fun, and I had a wonderful time reading the few chapters that you had! I do have one thing to help you with though, and that is paragraphs and dialogue.
When writing dialogue, every time there is a new speaker, skip a line or indent.

Example:
"Nevermind," Mingyu said, indulged in his pizza,"He's back."

"Hyung!" Soonyoung, if that's his name, yelled, hugging Jihoon,"You're here, finally!"

"Whatever," Jihoon rolled his eyes and pushed the taller boy away.

Notice how the line skips for a new speaker? On the phone, there isn't an indent button to do this, so skipping lines is best. If you are on a computer however, indent without skipping lines.

Example:
     "Nevermind," Mingyu said, indulged in his pizza,"He's back."
     "Hyung!" Soonyoung, if that's his name, yelled, hugging Jihoon,"You're here, finally!"
     "Whatever," Jihoon rolled his eyes and pushed the taller boy away.

Notes for others to follow:
Having a fresh, original plot will increase the amount of audience you have on your book. If you had a plot that everyone else was writing, what would make your book stand out? Or if you were writing an exact replica of a well-known story/movie, where's the fun is knowing what's going to happen next?
I bet you two bucks (because I only have a few dollars) that 3/4 of my audience on Rich Kids didn't know that Soonyoung turned out to be what he turned out to be. And that's the kind of feeling you want! You want to carry suspense and have an emotional bondage with the audience through the originality of your book.
I guarantee you, writing your own ideas is much more fun then writing someone else's, and you'll be able to see how far you can go with your creativity.

Go ahead and try this tip out on your next book! Have fun and be creative!