Right. Okay... this is basically gunna be 'how not to make a mary/gary sue.'
And I'm going to use my own creepypasta oc. Yes those are my older drawings of them.
Originally named Hb or Halloween. Was a girl aged 14, real name Blue.
That's all I put about her... yeah pretty bad I know.
The last photo (on the right)is the improved hb or now known as 'The Harvester'.
His title was given to him by the papers and forensics who studied the corpses by the way he killed. 'He seemed to harvest the more vital internal organs, and he is very sloppy with the way he has killed as if he was improvising' he once was a proxy for the slenderman but he disobeyed him on several occasions also almost getting other proxies caught by the authorities. For this hb was exciled from the house to the outskirts of the forest where he found an old garage which he now calls home. (Small backstory let me know if you want to know more about him)
Oh, hb is now a guy due to the fact... guys are cool and the pasta fandom is teaming, no... OVER FLOWING, with female ocs.
This go for all ocs, try making one or more male ocs and visa versa.
My oc, hb, im always trying to improve because I worry too much about if hes a gary/mary sue. Here's a thing, alway try to improve the oc but dont over worry(like me), ask people to review the oc. Different people even strangers might be able to help improve it.
As I said back in the first chapter(self insterts) never have your oc linked to a main character, i mean this by them being the best friend or a family member, keep the introduction sutble. I've just repeated myself again...
Personalities and history/backstory can be a huge flaw in oc development. Why would an oc be happy IF they were abused, bullied and upset? It makes no sense. Also make the oc's personality blanced with their characteristics, because no-one is perfect.
Errrr what else is there.... AH! clothing, hair styles, etc. THIS IS A PROBLEM. Let me see.... okay.
It's nice for different style of clothing, but really? Your going to put her in booty shorts, short skirts, tank tops, BRA or just... PANTIES?! Wow... now your saying shes not a slut? The clothing says otherwise.
Lets be reasonable here, we are judged for what we wear now a days, don't wear a certain brand of clothing or not the right brand. You will be picked/bullied on, I know this happens. So be more clever when dressing your oc.
Now hair: unless the world has vibrant hair(like anime) please keep the natural colours to, ya know, natural. Okay I know you can dye you hair all colours today but again think logically, school wont let a girl with bright pink hair into school now will they?
BE creative with the hairstyles, yep the emo flap is easy to do but having a different hairstyle can help with making the oc more rememberable.
The looks of an oc can be a problem also... somehow. Hydrocondria, is when two eyes are a different colour. If an oc has this, keep the colours close together; blue and brown, green and brown, blue and brown. Heres another idea about the eyes, keep them natural colours also it's pretty simple.
Big lips... it's a genetic thing.
DON'T OVER DO MAKEUP, KAY? Not many people wear makeup, or a lot of it anyway.
I really didn't want to make this chapter too long. Sorry if it is.
Hope it helped.
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