Kitten: This is the cliche love type.
Plot : We start off with a rather good looking guy.Ok,still believable,not overly overpowered.
And then he goes to highschool.A kind dorky girl looks at him and it's love at first sight.Getting rather cheesy,but still alright.And then some bullies pick on him even though he's a school jock, and dork girl comes to his rescue.This is the part where it gets unlogical.A school jock tries to stand up for himself. Gets beaten.A petite girl yells at said bully.Bully runs away. And then we get the sickly sweet scene of 'are you alright !?Girl,he has a black eye ! Do you think he's alright !? And the scene where their hands touch and they stare at each other.For ten minutes.
The boy goes home.And suddenly he's flash backing and we learn about his angsty past.Apparently his dad is a mafia boss and his parents hate his guts and he's abused and he escaped from said abusive house and never seen the sun and never felt love and so he's infatuated with dork girl.
After a few days boy confesses to dork girl.Suddenly dork girl goes WAY OCC(Out Of Character) and laughs at him and acts like the school's most notorious mean girl and is going like 'Haha like I like you I'm way more awesome than you loser !' And cue the pity scene.
The boy is heartbroken and goes back home.And he goes all depressed suddenly.Boy,you've known the girl for two days,why you so depressed ?! And he's like I'm gonna hate you forever dork girl a min later.....talk about quick change.
And the next day we see a scene where dork girl is bullied by mean girls.And suddenly all the hate disappears and he's her hero in shining armor.And the girl has an excuse like 'We weren't meant to be together I'm a dork you're a jock.' And the guy comforts her and they date.End of story.
Kitten:I have no prob against cheesy love novels,but this ? BOI you're more hormonal than a PMSing teenage girl !(No offense ladies) Too cliche.And also,where is the goddamn love in your life !? I've seen OC's with sad pasts that legit made me cry,but him ? YOU ARE NOT LORD VOLDEMORT CALM THE FUDGE DOWN WITH THE ANGST ! *sighs and ends rant *
Mary Sue rating : 6/10
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