"This is a creepypasta
Better not be a bad one I've seen to many sues/Stus
Name:Danny Shadow
I was wrong the name it self cuts me on the edge.
Age:18
Its one of the sue ages gosh damnit. Creepypasta is not meant for 16 year old kids who are Fucking knock offs.
Height:5'7
There is no way any human is that tall,ANYTHING AT ALL REALLY. THESE KIDS MUST BE STOPPED.
Pet : twin hellhound pups
plays evanescence- Wake me up. CAN'T WAKE UP.
Race demon wolf
CAN'T WAKE UP. SAVE ME FROM THE MARY SUES.
Appearance: black hair with white highlights ,wolf ears and her left eye is white and her right eye is black with a red iris,she wears dark clothes mostly black and grey hoodies with jeans with a hole cut out for her tail
Oh my god. NO. GET OUT OF HERE WITH THAT VILE CREATURE. THROW IT INTO THE INCINERATOR.
Personality: clever,sneaky,smart,creative,confused easily,lonely,insane,and sarcastic
No.im Fucking done. IM FUCKING DONE. *flips table* HER PERSONALITY LITERALLY IS ONLY GOOD THINGS. IM FUCKING DONE I QUIT.
She has a crush on Eyeless Jack.
I swear to-. No these are cold blooded killers. Jack doesn't just go after kidneys. He goes after your whole organ system. So shut up and sit down. Mary sue. Take notes.
Weapons: since she is half wolf she uses claws and teeth and she has demon powers but does carry small daggers just in case.
Wake me up. WAKE ME UP INSIDE. CAN'T WAKE UP.
Backstory: her parents died in a house fire when she was four ,she lived with the wolves in the woods until she was 12 then was take and turned into a demon and lived in hell til she was 16 then came back to earth ,only to be taken in by slender man when he found her killing one of his proxies targets
Her saying when she kills people is may the moon goddess have mercy on your soul
She has a wolf form so she shifts into a black and white wolf but only when she sense danger,scared,pissed off,or can't control her powers"
Has linking park-crawling and evanescence- wake me up both playing in background. That has to be one of the worst Backstory I have ever heard. It's logic is so flawed I can make a whole paragraph about it. Died in a house fire when she was four. Then how did she survive. First of all how was she ever a werewolf? Four year Olds are silly most of the time and don't have the intelligence to even FUCKING open a door. Lived in the woods with the wolfs until she was 12. Im surprise they haven't abandoned her. I would be disappointed in my Mary sue child. Then turned into a demon. First of all that is so...idiotic. From what I know you have to be dead to go to hell or heaven (if they even exist IM not religious). Second of all wouldn't she be trapped in hell? And found by slender man when she was 16 for killing one of his targets. That is so-dumb. 16 is the sue age. Second of all he should have killed you and wouldn't one of the proxies found you instead of slenderman? What the Fuck is moon goddess have mercy on your soul. What is this? The moon goddess doesn't exist unless your character believes in that. That probably the only slightly logical thing in this Backstory. Im not even gonna mention the shifting thing.
Mary sue scale:120%
Kill it with fire.
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