This is a series of scenes when people realize that they're actually in love. I personally think that it's cute already, but let's move on to the critique.
Firstly: How we doing in terms of length?
From what I've read each scene is about a page or two. I guess it's whenever the author is moved. This is good for what they're trying to put out there, though, since not many people will want to sit through an extensive amount of pages to get to the point that they've been waiting for.
Unless you're one of those writers who put so much suspense in that the readers don't even notice they've read so much to get to what they didn't see coming, but felt in the back of their minds.
Secondly: How is the language?
The language used appears to shift slightly with the different perspectives that are taken in each of the scenes. This is exactly what should be happening, because if it were all the same, it'd be like we were reading about the same person falling in love dozens of times. No one wants to read that, especially not I.
However, there are moments when it seems a bit iffy, as if the author isn't totally sure of which perspective they're using. It'd do well for them to go back a bit, and make sure they know exactly what they were going for. Other than that, the language could be related to on different levels.
Lastly: How are we looking interest wise?
While I'm not much of a romance junky (maybe I actually am >.>), this was cute. I think it'd be an interesting read with a significant other, or just by yourself if you're having relationship qualms. Now, I don't know if it'll work personally since I'm Forever Alone, but maybe it will.
Anyways, this was a good read for me, though I didn't find much interest in the romance. Sorry, but it's not really my style...
