**Cover is NOT by me**
Send me your oc's and I will critique them to the best of my ability. Also, I will be BRUTALLY honest, so if you can't take my honest critique then don't read this book.
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@Waffelz
Your oc overall is pretty original, I haven't seen many UnderTale oc's that AREN'T skeletons. Then again, I am guilty to this, my oc is half skele, sort of. . . I don't understand why you put artistic as a strength (if we talking about weaknesses and strengths in a fighting stand point). Being artistic kind of seems like just an add on, because it's only mentioned once and then never brought up again. And the parents dying also seems like an add on. . . I like the mention of siblings though! But you could put more detail into them. One more thing, is your oc aware that the Royal Gaurd is meant to slay humans? And she's a pacifist? Why does she want to join the Royal Gaurd if she's peck fist AND is aware that they are meant to kill humans to bring the souls to King Asgore. Unless she is naive to this, which would make a compelling story.
MARYSUE RATING:
3/10
I'm sorry that it took me so long to respond to this, but thank you for not spamming me. I'm sorry if any of this offends, I have NO intent of hurting anyone's feelings, just here to give my input on things you could fix!
