so my language arts teach commented on what i wrote
Great story...here is what is awesome.
Really good seeing...Dead Mans Woods is perfect. The house is creppy.Good characters...I'm starting to get a feel for the characters. You could start adding in little details about the character's age, clothes, or how they look.Great plot...you jump right into the story off the bat...no backstory...that's good because it grabs your reader immediately.You do a great job with dialogue too. I like that it's not all just a description of what happens.A couple of areas to improve...passive voice. This is tricky but instead of saying "A sigh could be heard" just say "Sam sighed" or whoever is talking.I can't wait to read more!
is he reading the same story???????????
cause the story i wrote sucks
