Albert: Okay so the first thing not to do is script like writing. Now I'm going to go into a little more detail about it here. Let me give you an example of script writing which my lovely assistant-
Dave: Bro. I'm your Bro
Albert: Same difference- has prepared for us. (Stares at Dave, expecting her to pull out the homework she was told to do, only to find out that she doesn't have it)
Dave: Umm about that....
Albert: Daaaave....
Dave: I swear that I meant to! Just, not when you needed.. it...
Albert:...
Dave:...
Albert...and this is why you are the assistant and not the bro. Anyway! I guess I'll just have to write it for you! So here is an example of what NOT to do:
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'The girl looked at her with big, sad eyes. Girl: please? I promise I won't get it anywhere. Mom: that's what you said last time, but there's still sticky stuff all over your seat. Girl: But Mommy! I promise I won't do it this time!! Mom: *sigh* I guess you can have some ice cream. You did get an A on your math test.'
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Albert: so do you see what I mean here? There isn't much emotion or story-telling in this. It's just like reading a script for a movie. And most people don't like that type of writing. It doesn't give you a good feel on how the characters talk, and doesn't give much of a draw for the story. So now, here's an example what what you SHOULD do:
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The girl look up at her mother with big, sad eyes. "Please? I promise I won't get it anywhere." She whined, still staring at her mom. "That's what you said last time," her mother answered, "but there's still sticky stuff all over your seat." The girl whimpered in response. "But Mommy! I promise I won't do it this time!!" The girl's mother sighed in defeat. "I guess you can get some ice cream. You did get an A in your math test."
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Albert: Do you see the difference? You can actually tell how the character says the line, and it gives more description in your story (which is always good).
