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Username: SplendidDraggy
Book Title: Long May I Reign

Score: 74%

Improvement: There is a great part here where you keep the consistency of the plot; But,  the impact of a story gets lost when it's grammar is a bit complicated. There are some moments where I can see this minimal problem of redundancy... Aside from that,  it was a nice creation,  and the title is a very sharp hook!

Judge: FerocityBlooms

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AWFrasier

Watcher(The Saga)

Score: 83%

It was a fantastic idea all in all.
The descriptions and the idiomatic expressions you used were also amazing,  I only happened to notice the lack of craving you give to the reader, it was a bit boring at the middle,  so I think you should add what I call 'The Charge' in your story.

Same judge

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NightElfLady

A Raven's Tale

79%

A nice story indeed,  but next time,  try to shorten the summary, introduce your characters more and expand your description like...

" I was too exhausted to care... Nearly succumbing to the painful bliss called blackness, my black wings were giving up with smaller flaps, going deeper in the mercy of a crying horizon... "

You know, something like that, try to make it chunky.
My head hurt in trying to digest it and imagine the scene.

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SebastianTHJ

Titan Woods

81%

Same thing is that, you need to shorten the description and blabber more about who and how your characters look.

Like...

" The God, Libra, took off running in a more thrilling pace, his (eye color) eyes scanned quickly as his feet tapped in a steady rhythm of hurried pants and gasps. Only a few bits of energy was left for him to survive from the creatures,  that he himself hath created. The soft White robe he wore is now stained with dirt, mud and Sweat"

It's up to you then to make it digestable and imaginable.

Don't be sad, it just deserves recognition and I'm sure people will like it so much.

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The Ancient King

77%

I want to be honest, I like the way you started it with tension and cold chills of mystery, there are other conversations where you don't need to literally describe their accent, just emphasize...
Say for example...
" Chubba likes cupcake! "
Even when refering to himself or...
"Scatter, or I'll make you suffer" He said in a deep,  monotone voice with hissing sounds as the words rolled like slime from his tongue.

I like it, and I want to share you a good lesson if you choose me as a judge.

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Niranju98

The Missing Piece of History

Alright,  this one,  I think has something wrong in it's title...
I've thought of one.
" The Lost Shard Of Eternity"

I will give you an advice once you choose me as your tutor. As you can see, the votes are sinking on a few parts because I noticed the dullness it had in the middle; strengthen your title, lessen the description and make them wanting for more in every chapter. It is a good shot, you know?