Title: Hidden Love
Author: Butterfly440
Genre: Romance, Teen Fiction
Summary: In the kingdom of Fae (not the realm of faeries), there is a certain tradition anually called the Royal Bridal Lottery. Every girl has been chosen by their own choice, from their own nobility. But what happens when, Avonelle, a girl from one particular country, is chosen and brought to the palace as a candidate? what stirring events can happen from one special girl, when she steps into the magnificent palace. And if that doesn't sound unusual enough, what will Avonelle do when she starts to realize that many things are not as easy as they seem in the palace?
8/10 The summary can easily attract attention, although, if it can be shortened then it would be even better
Number of Chapters (that were reviewed): 2 chapters
Rate: 9/10 really great book! Perfect pacing, minor grammar errors.
Grammar/Pacing: Your pacing is great! It's not too slow or too fast, it's perfect. There was about two grammar errors, but nothing that was really obvious. For example: The apostrophe in "brother's" means the brother owns something not "brother is".
Some Improvements: You don't have much to improve on. All I have noticed were minor capitalization errors and grammar errors. You just need to go back and edit that. Other than that, you're flawless.
Cover: 9/10 I really love your cover! I can definitely see how it relates to your story!
My Favorite Characters: JULIAN! I really love the way you described sweet baby Julian. He sounds adorable and innocent (even when he pukes on her). I love how you described him with his green eyes and shaggy blonde hair.
Avonelle is a great character! I like the way you portrayed her in the beginning, she is a hard worker and wants to stay and take care of her family. Although, she is crazy for not wanting to be married to the king!
Additional Notes: I really love this story! You're wonderful with descriptions. I'm definitely going to keep reading this! I would recommend this to other readers, so keep updating!
