I like your story, pero parang kulang ng thrill e, okay na siya maganda na siya. Needs a little-little improvement!
And next, sa mga POV'S like asher. Maging serious sana pag sa kanay o 'di kaya maging chill or relax because he's a playboy.
Yun lang! Wala na akong masabi pero, wait sana naman sa level 2 sumunod kana rin sa genre at theme na ibibigay ko. Yun lang good luck!

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