How's Life Been Goin' (RisenDawn Edition)

PERSONAL CRINGE

Months ago, I was a very cringy writer. I use to make fantasy stories and stuff, I guess. So, prepare to laugh your butts off reading this legit draft I copied and pasted from my unpublished book.

*sigh*

Here we go. (I'll also comment on them.. well yeah)

Before The Blood Moon Rises: Chapter 1, Element.
(wow! what a great title 😱)

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"Dear! I think this is it!" The king shouted in excitement. It has arrived!
"What? This quick!? We better announce it!" The Queen replied instantly
"Yes! Finally the time has arrived! I'm going to have a sibling!" The prince replied happily. (wait, isn't the prince just 2 years old here? I remembered that this pwincez was born on January 1 while he was born on Christmas)
The Crystal has formed fully. All the people were informed with the exciting news.
The Crystal was placed carefully on the balcony of the castle where everyone has seen it.
"We are happy to announce our second child! She or He will someday rule the entire universe,after her older brother finished ruling." The Queen said in glee ( I remembered when I drew the picture, IT WAS TRANSPARENT. HOW CAN THEY NOT SEE THAT DAS A GIRL. and no, I am not going to show that drawing because it's the worst drawing I made.)
"Our child's name will be named after the stars of the universe and the name we always wanted." The King said (*clap* *clap* creativity A+)
As the King finished his sentence,the Crystal started to float.
Many lights started to get out of the Crystal,causing a beautiful,bright rainbow.
A baby girl appeared. With beautiful golden hair and bright blue eyes as the bright blue sky.  (yeah! Cause who never heard a main character with golden freaking hair and blue eyes!?)
Something unusual is with her hair. Her hair is shaped like a star,just like her father's.
(a special snowflake, duh. also, how did a baby grow hair that long? is she 1 or some age that isn't a newborn? wait.. don't answer that question.)
The King and Queen held her and smiled.
"We will name her Estrella Dawn Universe." They said. (lmao creativity)
All of the kingdom smiled and clapped as they have found their second ruler. (IDIOTS, SHE HAS AN OLDER BROTHER. SHE'LL BE THE THIRD, NOT 2ND. I actually feel bad for "Sunset")
They celebrated freely.
On the princess' 15 birthday,she will receive a locket filled with a powerful element. (oh wowee I bet something bad's gonna happen. WOOPS SPOILER)

"And that's today!
Hello,let's start back from the beginning! My name's Estrella Dawn Universe. But,you don't have to call me Estrella Blah Blah. (typical. rebellious. child.)
Call me....Dawn. People have always called me "Princess Estrella" Which means "Princess Star" (again, typical. rebellious. child.)
It drives me nuts. Being a princess means you have to do boring tasks. (omg ariel/merida is that u)
My brother's name is Prince Sunset. Father's name is King Rise while mother's is...Queen Twilight (again, wow creativity)
Anyways!
Today's the day I finally have the locket full of elements! My parents always told me stories of how our ancestors from generations have given their sons and daughters a powerful locket filled with a powerful element.
My older brother had the locket already. He's 3 years older than me,which explains a lot. I'm 15 and his 18." (ok first of all, is she mentally insane to talk to herself to say her true life-story?)

It is the day for the coronation.
Delicious food was placed on the dining room table,all of the's kingdom was invited to celebrate. ("all of the's kingdom")
All had to look their best. This is a special day. If the princess keeps the locket,all peace will be restored. (ISn'T tHe KIngdOM aLrEADY in peACE!?)
But,as the King and Queen walked on the hallway,
The King Of Visions,appeared with a concerned face.
"Good day to you,King Tres." The King said. (I remember that his name is "Tres" cause he has three friggin eyes. wowwwwww!!!!)
"Why did you visit so early?" The Queen said. (he's the king of visions you b- )
"There's no time to explain,I must tell you something important." He replies (then later he explained the whole thing)
"Well,what is it?" The King asked