«story name» Hammer to Fall
«author» katebishvp ( Amelia)
«reviewer» PsychicLavender ( Sam )
«rating»
«grammar»
9/10
Since it's a mostly social media fic you can't really judge for grammar, but in the real life bits, it's pretty good.
Scanning over it now I see a few minor grammatical issues, but who doesn't have them when writing sans editor. If you don't have it already, I'd download the Grammarly app, it helps me find my mistakes. (This goes for everyone, download this app it will make your life hella easier.)
«character development»
8/10
I'm in love with Adrienne and Elias, this is how single moms should be written. Take notes people. Adrienne is careful and concerned with her child's safety, but she still can have fun with him too.
You're giving us some proper development here, slowly revealing things piece by piece, but not directly telling us. I can tell Adrienne is still hurting from the loss of her husband, and you didn't have to go out and say: "Adrienne is still hurting from the loss of her husband." You know?
«aesthetics»
6/10
A bit simple, but you can't go wrong with that. I for one love simple, but some people need that A E S T H E T I C.
«writing style»
8/10
Lowkey hooked.
Forgot I was actually reviewing the story, I got so caught up in it.
With the social media parts, it's sorta hard to remember who everyone is, but that might just be me.
«plot»
10/10
Yes.
In love with it so far. I like slow burns because it's how a relationship should work. When you're with someone it's not like- snap- and you're instantly in love. Relationships take time to grow and build and that's what you're doing.
«overall rating»
8.2/10
Keep up the good work, Amelia. Can't wait for the next chapter :)
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