So You Want To Make A Good Warriors OC

Wolfblossom

Thanks XxPinkybudYTxX for submitting her!

Name: Wolfblossom

Name Reason: Im writing a story about her, and her mother Starpelt got an omen about a wolf. (First OC Special snowflake stuff)

A bit of a strange but pretty name, I'm not sure it makes too much sense in the Warriors universe but I'd be quite interested in the story behind it. Something you might want to include: why did she get the suffix 'blossom'?

I'll touch more on her mother and her mother's name in a bit.

Age: Became a warrior at usual age, 12 moons.

Makes sense, and I'm assuming she either retires at the usual age or dies before that? It might be nice to mention that, even if it's just for your own reference.

Gender: She-Cat

The common choice, but I honestly can't fault you for that :)

Clan and Rank: Beachclan (OC Clan)

Ooh that's a name I haven't heard before. I don't know why, but I just really love fan Clans. Especially when they have cool stories behind them and whatnot. I don't know how much info you have on this Clan so far, but some questions to consider might include:

- How did BeachClan get its name?

- Where is it located?

- How many members does it have?

- Is it associated with the other Clans?

- How was it created?

- Do they follow the warrior code?

- What unique lore or personal history might they have?

- Do the hierarchy and the structures work the same as the other Clans?

- What kind of names would they use?

- etc.

Appearance: Brown cat with Black tabby stripes,and amber eyes.

A short and sweet description, and quite realistic as well, although you might like to take into account some extra things like fur length, body shape or other distinguishing factors (for example, bent ears, long tail, curly whiskers, stocky build, etc.)

Personality: Kind and sweet, but quite short tempered, lies to make others happy.

The personality is nice, although I would suggest that you consider expanding the points you have already. For example, what makes her lose her temper?

Also, did you mean 'likes to make other happy' or 'lies to make others happy'? I mean, it's valid either way.

Family: Mother: Starpelt, Father: Eaglewing, Brothers: Moonheart, Treeleaf.

The names in general are quite nice, and at least somewhat fitting (I particularly like Eaglewing), but prefixes like Moon and especially Star are typically not used. I suggest you keep in mind that 'Star' is used pretty much exclusively for the suffix of a leader. Also, although 'Moon' is technically allowed it is not common and may be putting the cat on a pedestal as it is a sacred name.

Background: Kit of the leader, but she never had time for kits, so her sister, Starpelt, adopted them.

An interesting backstory, although not entirely unique. That's not a bad thing, however, as it allows for more change in the character's future. I found that it was worded a little strangely so it took me a hot minute to figure out what you meant. I might suggest that you read over and check your writing for clarity.

Additionally, is there anything else you may consider adding to the backstory? It isn't necessary, but if you plan on writing about your character it would be very helpful to have a solid understanding of their previous experiences and life story.

Future Mate: Finchtalon

Future kits: Branchkit and Wildkit

I quite like the names you use here as they are both unique and straightforward. Who, if I may ask, is Finchtalon, and what is the story behind them and Wolfblossom?

All around Wolfblossom is a decent character, with some room for improvement. Don't get me wrong, however, learning about character creation and storytelling is an acquired skill and won't be mastered in a short period of time.

Earlier you mentioned that Wolfblossom is your first oc, or at least your first for the Warriors universe? If so, holy heck congratulations because this is a fantastic start. If not, that's okay too, and I would suggest fleshing out her personality and backstory, as well as finding resources online that may help you with name creation and accuracy to the original stories.

Wolfblossom isn't perfect, but she isn't terrible either. This character can still become something great with a little bit of tweaking, refining and polishing.

Thank you so much for submitting her!