The Chaos Awards 6!

ChickLit Winners!

Hello there lovelies! Are you ready for our first round of winners? Great! First up we have the winners of the ChickLit genre! I would like to thank: @BooskiBabii For judging this genre. You worked hard and you were the first to hand in your results, thank you! I would like to ask all participants to please thank your judge for their hard work.

If you want one of the lovely winners stickers you'll need to send a private message to my main account: coolcourtney5 Please tell me which genre and place you've won! There are stickers for honourable Mentions as well! Speaking of Honourable Mentions... Here they are!!

Honourable Mentions: 

Girls Astray by: NatalieJennifer7

Review: I love the cover and how you work your name in between the title.

The summary needs organized but the actual summary is really good. It captured my interest instantly.

I can picture Amy very well. She is the relatable friend in high school who is quiet, and doesn't get much attention. I adore how well you develop your characters. Lolita made me realize that there is more to the popular girls. We, as readers, see inside of a sad mind of a teenage girl that no one realizes has issues. You touch on reality, and I love it.

I like the idea of That Girl. I like how each scene develops the plot further so it flows smoothly.

I would like more details of the characters surroundings. Show readers what their rooms and classrooms look like. Most of the scenery is well expressed and you show the girls personalities wonderfully.

The chapters are on the short side. Some of the paragraphs are too long and need edited into two or three paragraphs. Many places are lacking commas. The grammar is good and the flow of the words is great.

This book took me back to high school, which was many years ago. It made me feel like I was inside of the mind of these characters. Once I have time I plan to finish reading this book.

Shooting the Messenger by: PageTurnersPen 

Review: The cover is good, but the font could be different. Also, you should include your name on the cover.

For the summary – you should move the first bit of information to the bottom ( to be more organized and when readers see a preview of your book, this is all they see). The actual summary is an attention grabber and a greatly summarized version of your book.

I like how you show Claire is color blind by her clothing choice. You describe Mr. Macello's features very well, but not Claire's. Show readers what she looks like without directly telling them.

When the story starts you need to state whose point of view it is in. I assume it was Claire at the beginning by the words that were spoken, but halfway down the chapter it says 'Claire's POV' . We are reading some of the same information twice. Instead of repeating the same scene, show Mr. Macello's thoughts on Claire's answers. The story behind with a bang, literally. It has a great plot development and flow.

You only need one space between each paragraph, not two. Each speaker desperately needs their own paragraph. This took make points away from your novel. You only need italics for thoughts, flashbacks and when putting emphasis on a word. It definitely confuses the reader not knowing if it's thoughts or dialogue.