"Their abilities?" Steve asked as they made their way towards the elevator.
"He's got increased metabolism and improved thermal homeostasis. Her thing is neural electric interfacing, telekinesis, mental manipulation. The younger ones has a small dose of telekinesis and the ability to create illusions, a great way to mess with your head."
Steve looked at her confused. Annoyed at his lack of knowledge, Maria rolled her eyes. "He's fast, she's weird, and she's an oddball."
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Concept - Creativity, Ideas, Style: 5/4
Plot: 5/5
Tone - Characters, Language, Point Of Views: 5/3
Voice: 5/5
Spelling and Grammar - Punctuation, Editing: 10/7
Style: 10/8
Organization - Research: 5/5
Development - Plot, Tone, Characters: 5/3
Total: 50/40
Review/Comments by Judge: The plot is intriguing enough, but requires heavy editing in both the character views and writing style.
Congratulations to mrstarkwewon
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