Dedicated to: richthinker_40 and melanin100
Hi guys,after a few criticisms,I have decided to update my book a LITTLE. Like I said,I need you guys to criticise my book.
Lauren's pov:
As she walked past the aisle,smile was plastered on her ever beaming face.Lauren was so happy about her wedding. She glided towards the altar to meet the bridegroom.
"Do you Lauren David take John Mark to be your lawfully wedded husband in sickness and in health,in obesity and slimness,to cherish and to hold,till death do you part?"asked the priest.
"I do."
"And do you John Mark take Lauren David to be your lawfully wedded husband in sickness and in health,in obesity and slimness, to cherish and to hold,till death do you part?"
"I don't."
Whoa,what's John trying to do?
"John,what's going on?"She inquired.
"Look Lauren,I don't really love...."
"Wake up lazy bone,it's 7:00am and you're late for school."said Mrs Rachel,Lauren's mom. She felt rudely interrupted by her mother for cutting her dream short.
"But mom,just let me sleep for a while."
"Would you take your bath ?" Mom asked with her arms at akimbo.
Lauren David was the first out of three kids. She..wait...Hi.. My name is Lauren David and I was dreaming of getting married here's the thing,my mom is a bad vibe and always disrupts my sleep when am in the best part or worse part. I'm an eighteen year old teenager (obviously).
I wouldn't say I'm beautiful. Although I have a blonde hair,white teeth,a small pink lips and blue eyes that dad says look like "the oceans colour". If you've seen my younger sister,Martha,( who is five year old) then you would know I'm a monster compared to that beauty.
What was I doing? I was just beginning to day dream about money growing on a tree at the back of my house until, my silly younger brother snaps his finger in my face. I've got to tell you a secret, I'm a professional day dreamer .
"Snap out of it."said Alexander.
Xander,16, was a really cute guy,I never really liked admitting it because it might make his head swell. He had this round face,small brown eyes,and had a cute kind of smile that I never could classify as devilish or sweet. Xander had this bad habit of always smiling,I really did not liked that about him Although he was stubborn and naughty,I still loved him because he was a loyal dude.
"Would you quit brooding,and take your bath. " Xander said.
"Shut up,get out of my room. " I yawned,while stretching my body.
I quickly got into the bathroom and came out as quickly as possible. It was the start of school,I really had no time waste. I hurriedly put on a black pair of jean,a black tank top,a plaid jacket,black canvas,packed my hair in a ponytail,and to top it,I put a toothpick in my mouth.
"Lauren, how long does it take to take your bath and start moving? "Xander yelled.
"Are you coming for breakfast or not?" Martha screamed.
"No,I'm not having breakfast. " I said running down the stairs, heading straight for the door.
"Where are you off to?!" Mom yelled.
"To church. You ought to know I'm off to school. " I said.
"So,you're ready?" Xander asked.
I removed the toothpick from my mouth and came close to him.
