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Today's review is on Naomi by rosie-doodles on Tumblr I've gathered all info and important concept art we will be looking at. Art belongs to Rosie!
Let's start off with her reference sheet
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Before I begin if Rosie the creator is seeing this I'd recommend adding a last name also I can't judge the first name since Naomi is also used as a Japanese name! First thing I'd like to point out is the extra outfit which is actually good to have.
° Most of the persona characters have a different casual outfit this detail is very cute!
° As a artist my self I may go into design to much, but her school uniform (the first one) would probably be different since I'm pretty sure a school dress code would have students wear socks and black shoes. Again I'm not sure but I would recommend adding that in. In general the first outfit is very cute and I like it a lot!
° One thing that slightly bothers me is the big amount of hair. It would be a bit hard to have that much hair and can look a bit extra. The legit is completely ok but I think the hair should be thinned down a bit.
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Heres a close up of her mask! I do really like the colours abs design of the mask and it's quite frankly pretty unique. Later on she mentions ballet being Naomi's hobby which the mask matches her perfectly! Excuse my small pet peeve add some space around where her eyes would be, like other mask your eyes wouldn't perfectly fit into the mask which would result it some space, maybe draw that in next time if you'd like.
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