Personal Rant Book

Paragraph Spacing.

Let's talk about the spacing in paragraphs.

I'm gonna tone down on my language here, as this is a common mistake in new writers.

Okay, you have a story idea. Good plot, interesting characters, a nice world as well. However, please don't make it look something like this.

(extracted from my own story, edited to remove the spacing)

"Ah, I see. I think it's more efficient since I can shift the same distance without having to spend the same amount of Mana twice. The range should, most likely, increase.However, something else caught my attention. There was something else glinting under the pile of dust from the Core.I wafted away the dust, and a Battle Axe was revealed underneath which seemed to be an exact copy of the Battle Axe that the Minotaur used. I could use it, but I don't know how I'll be carrying this thing around... Wait a minute.I have that one skill, don't I?Uh... [Item Box]?A small white box appeared in front of me, which I'm guessing is the [Item Box].I moved the [Item Box] onto the axe and there was no reaction. I tried to touch the axe with the [Item Box], but nothing happened again.So I thought about storing the axe... And the huge Battle Axe got sucked into the [Item Box].Hmm... guess it's thought-controlled. It should be useful for later, but for now I'll cancel it.I looked over to where Reina was at... uh, Reina?I approached the hole we made, and my [Danger Sense] immediately alerted me of 5 presences of a similar strength to the Minotaur, and another who was definitely a tier above... I used [Obscure] and shifted next to the hole. I peeked over and saw the strongest one, who was undoubtedly an A rank standing over a cowering Reina. I re-summoned both my Scythes as the skill gained a level."

Do you see what I mean? It looks extremely messy, and instantly repells me and makes it harder for me to follow along with the story. Now let's compare that with the original version.

(same extract)

" Ah, I see. I think it's more efficient since I can shift the same distance without having to spend the same amount of Mana twice. The range should, most likely, increase.

However, something else caught my attention. There was something else glinting under the pile of dust from the Core.

I wafted away the dust, and a Battle Axe was revealed underneath which seemed to be an exact copy of the Battle Axe that the Minotaur used. I could use it, but I don't know how I'll be carrying this thing around... Wait a minute.

I have that one skill, don't I?

Uh... [Item Box]?

A small white box appeared in front of me, which I'm guessing is the [Item Box].

I moved the [Item Box] onto the axe and there was no reaction. I tried to touch the axe with the [Item Box], but nothing happened again.

So I thought about storing the axe...

And the huge Battle Axe got sucked into the [Item Box].

Hmm... guess it's thought-controlled. It should be useful for later, but for now I'll cancel it.

I looked over to where Reina was at... uh, Reina?

I approached the hole we made, and my [Danger Sense] immediately alerted me of 5 presences of a similar strength to the Minotaur, and another who was definitely a tier above... 

I used [Obscure] and shifted next to the hole. I peeked over and saw the strongest one, who was undoubtedly an A rank standing over a cowering Reina. I re-summoned both my Scythes as the skill gained a level."

You can see that the paragraphs are spaced out, making it easier to follow along and makes it look more clean. Try it out if you don't space, and it's going to help a lot.