The WARRIORS OF INK Contest

✅ REVIEWS : SAPPHIRE ✅

~ MARRIAGE – TORTURE TO LOVE BY shespeaks_starflyer ~

The cover was good but it could be blended in a more beautiful way. It was just a picture of intertwined hands and nothing that gave more insight of the story. Even the fonts didn’t appeal much.

Coming to the blurb, genuinely speaking it did possess the characteristics of the blurb but lacked in portraying the actual definition of the blurb. It did give the insight of the story but that’s not how a blurb is constructed and framed. The differences of the characters don’t sum up the blurb.

It wasn’t relevant to the genre either. The genre demanded something relatable for the teen age group and not marriage and post marriage hatred and dramas.

Grammar was smooth but it needed to be revised or edited. I found some sentences, even some dialogues that were a jumble of vague wording and blurry formations. The narrative voice wasn’t gripping at all as the strong and lucid flow it should have was lacking.

It represented more of a cliché based story and even the characters lacked originality.

~ POSSIBILITIES : YOU AND I BY Helly_18 ~

Good attempt in writing the story. But I’d like to drag your attention towards the elements that needed more focus and creativity. There were many instances where originality was lacking, making it look theatrical and vague. You didn’t threw much light at the word, ‘misogamist’, even the significance of it couldn’t be felt anywhere. In your story, Sanskaar didn’t hate marriages, instead he was against the idea of falling in love. So, that didn’t make him a misogamist.

You need to work hard on grammar and get your doubts and errors rectified, through it. Plot was nothing new and creative, instead I felt you could’ve added much more to this simple plot and on the other side, could’ve detached many unnecessary things.

~ UNHEARD SYMPHONY OF LOVE BY existingtodream ~

I’d like to start how much I liked the idea of portraying the story in someone else’s POV other than the main characters. Though emotions of the main characters were missing through this but still, I couldn’t deny that the idea was good and definitely this idea isn’t something that I keep stumbling upon. Not that it is ever done, but it is rare. Most writers don’t choose to go with someone else’s POV other than the main characters because that lacks the emotions of the main characters and the same thing happened here too.

The blurb is good but it doesn’t give enough background on the main characters and the conflicts.

The way the word, ‘misogamist’ was used, sounded clunky and awkward to pronounce. It was as if the word was just pushed somewhere in the middle to complete the ‘usage of word’ criteria. But that, literally, didn't appeal much.

~ DYSPOHRIA BY _khusiyaan_ ~

The story needs good formation, narrative dialogues, and creative plot. The basics of writing needed to be learned and carved more as there was a lack of basic skilling.