The WARRIORS OF INK Contest

✅ REVIEWS : CORNELIA ✅

~ MARRIAGE - TORTURE TO LOVE BY shespeaks_starflyer ~

Title:
Your title gives an idea of what your story is based on. Let’s take a look at how is it different from others.

Plot and characters:
The introduction of the characters was nice. But as the plot develops I felt the friendship is taking a back seat and there was no trust between them. It makes us question the male protagonist whether he understood his best friend or not.

Usage of word and catch:
Though the genre was relevant I felt the word could have been used in a better way. He could have explained his points more clearly. The plot described your understanding of catch nicely but overall I felt the plot and storyline was a bit cliché. In my opinion, he should have at least spoken to her once as to ‘why did you make this decision?’

Grammar and Detailing:
It was easy to read and written well. But I felt you could add some more details to your story.

As a reader:
I was intrigued by the introduction but then as the story goes on it became a common plot. You could give importance to the female lead too but you made her look weak. In a way it was like abuse is not a big deal and she has accepted it. I liked that he realised his mistake and the mother’s role was nice. I liked the way you portrayed her role.

Conclusion:
A good attempt but there’s room for improvement.

~ POSSIBILITIES – YOU AND I BY Helly_18 ~

Title:
An interesting one as it can be anything or everything.  A nice cover is an added bonus. Let’s take a look at their desires.

Plot and characters:
The blurb is beautiful and it expresses her feelings and emotions clearly through music. I loved the fact that the female protagonist is strong enough not to give up on her love and that is enough to know she is unique. Both the characters do inspire and affect us in a way and makes a place for them in our heart. Though the rest of the characters had a very little role they did their part well.

Usage of word and catch:
I felt the word could be phrased in a better way but the way you portrayed the catch was nice. It acted as a catalyst for the change in the mind-set and thus a happy ending. Thanks for the happy ending.

Grammar and Detailing:
It was pretty easy to read with simple words, but could use more detailing.

As a reader:
I loved the way you shaped the character of female protagonist and a vulnerable male protagonist was also a welcome change as there is always only a damsel who is always in distress.  It was a good story line and the fact that there is no negativity adds more beauty.

Conclusion:
A unique storyline and was finely executed.

~ UNHEARD SYMPHONY OF LOVE BY existingtodream ~

Title:
An intriguing title is enough to gather the attention of readers. I would like to applaud you for the title you chose for the story. Your cover and blurb are the same it gives an idea of something similar is happening in the story but let’s see what happens as the story progresses.