Hi! Please note that I am not a professional writer nor I am an experienced critic, just a writer wanting to help. The following are only my opinions to point out what can be reviewed. THIS REVIEW MAY ALSO CONTAIN SPOILER/S. Thank you ❣
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PASENSYA NATAGALAAANN. Kapag nahinto kasi ako sa pagbabasa (nang ilang araw, actually), binabasa ko muli from the start. Pashout-out sandali sa online classes ko pati sa keyboard kong ayaw mag type ng "g" at colon! Asang-asa ako sa auto-correct at suggestions ngayon HAHAHAHA
ALSO, I ONLY READ 30 PARTS. LET'S START!
TITLE
I like the title. Its simple, yet mahihimigan na ang 'slice of life' side ng kuwento. May hint na sa title pa lang. Is it catchy, though? Err... not so.
BOOK COVER
TBH, I like the former cover better. Sa typography lang ako may say doon HAHAHA But your new cover is still good. It's simple. I also appreciate na may connect ang picture sa cover doon sa ibang scenes sa kwento. I get some sad summer vibes na nasa kuwento rin naman. Overall, I like it. Hindi nga lang siya sobrang captivating.
BLURB
I like how you wrote the goals of the character there. It's also a risky move dahil dapat mapanindigan iyon sa kuwento. It plays a role in their character development. New readers would also be curious; "Bakit niya gustong makalimot? Bakit niya gustong maglaho?" It's thought-provoking.
The last sentence should end with a quotation mark since you used the word 'would', which implies to a question.
Overall, the blurb is short and intriguing. Nakulangan lang ako at medyo na-cliche-han sa last part, but nevertheless, it is connected to the conflict so...
