I don't even know

Someone help me qwp

So I have to revise my narrative and I don't know what to do to it-

can someone read through it and tell me what you think-? Be honest-

It should have been a normal Wednesday, but of course I had to go bike riding with Lizzy. Well, that was the plan.We were going to do what we normally do and meet up by Sheetz. However, Liz said she didn’t want to ride her bike so instead we met up at her house. After going up that hill and having an asthma attack along the way, Jackson, who happened to see me and decided to say hi, got to witness. I finally made it up the hill. I went into her house and we hung out for a bit . Then she asked if I could go to the church with her. 

I honestly didn’t think I would be allowed so I said “Probably not” and maybe I should’ve said no, maybe it would’ve been better if my parents said no. I could’ve stayed home and not gone through what happened later that night, but that’s something for later. Anyways, I hung out with a girl named Bridgette who lives down the road from Lizzy’s house. Who is much older than Lizzy and me, but that isn’t important. She was fun to hang out with and her and Liz convinced me to call my parents and ask about going to the church. With the confidence of goldfish, I called my mother and to all three of our surprise, she said yes! 

Soon however Lizzy had to go to dance so I stayed with Bridegette while we waited for her to come back so we could go. It wasn't a very interesting half hour waiting for Liz. We mostly played video games but when she got back, boy were we excited. The huge van pulled up and all of the kids who were going to the church got in. It wasn’t too long of a drive and we were mostly having fun talking and playing games on our phones. 

We got to the church, which was much bigger than I thought it would.I started feeling a bit anxious but my friends were with me so I knew I was going to be safe. Boy was I wrong, I should’ve lied and just said I didn’t feel good. It was too late for that now. 

It was pretty fun at first, I started to shake off my nervousness and it was replaced with a feeling of relaxedness. We were just throwing basketballs and I started to feel pretty okay. A tall skinny man walked in and the fun began. We started playing games together.

I didn’t notice anything until kickball began. I was nervous, and it was obvious. I didn’t calm down after my turn. I decided to shake off the feeling and continue. 
 
The game ended when the other group came down and here, my friend, is where everything went wrong.  I could feel myself begin to get dizzy.

“Get your stuff!” The leader yelled to get everyone's attention.

Slowly, I walk to the table that I put my purse on and carefully it on, trying to think of what was happening. Then it hit me. Panic attack. I’m having a panic attack. 

Quickly I pull on Lizzy’s sleeve. No response. I pull on her sleeve again. “Hmm?” she answered.

“Code red…” I mumble.

“What?”

“Code red..” I say a bit louder

“Code red? Or Code red??” 

“Code red.” I mimicked her voice

“Panic attack?” Lizzy whispered.

“Yeah..” I say with a small voice crack.

She quickly takes my hand and walks towards the door. I hug onto her as I feel my breath fasten. I’m shaking. I can hear people talking but it all is just a blur. The next thing I know the pastor is asking us if we could go to the kitchen or at least I think.

We walked into the kitchen and sat down. The pastor slid a water bottle across the table and said something to Lizzy then walked away. 

Lizzy then turned to me with a worried expression or at least I think, it’s all pretty hazy. She kept patting my leg and telling me “It’ll be okay.” or other calming phrases. 

Everything hurt. The world was spinning and I couldn’t stop it. Fat, warm tears rolled down my face as I held her hand. 

“Shh.. take a sip of water.” She handed me the water after she opened it. I took it and drank some letting out a soft sob after.

It hurt to breathe. My mind was racing. Everything was just too much. “Cat… look at me… look at me... breath in..and out..”

I tried my best to calm down. It didn’t know what was going to happen. I honestly thought I was dying. I had a terrible headache and I couldn’t breathe. I slowly but steadily caught my breath and hid my face in my hands. Lizzy handed me the water bottle and with a sigh I looked up and shakily took it. “Thank you.. And sorry..” 

“You don’t need to apologize.” She laughed, which made me smile a bit.

“You ready?” 

“Mhm..” I mumble with a soft nod as I stand up, taking her hand and using my other hand to carry the water bottle. We start walking towards the room in which the others are located.

“I’ll be with you so you don’t need to worry.” Liz smiled calmly.

“Thank you..”