@DanCoutu
Sorry to bother, I know this isn’t really your favorite genre from reading your description, but would you mind giving me some feedback on my book? I’ve only published 5 chapters yet but I already feel like some part are too cliché or just poorly written. I would love to hear what you think of it❤️
Just wanted to say thanks for sticking with Indentured through to the end. I really appreciate it! :)
@KellyJBurke I like the way that you wrapped book one! Also the revisions to the story that involve more the early crew really kick up the level of engagement with the reader. Nicely done!
@KellyJBurke I like the way that you have revised the story. It is quite a bit more engaging now. I'm also glad to see silent recover the soul sword. Curious to see what you reveal once the group exits the ship.
Hi Dan,
I see you have got to Chapter 25. I should have the next five amended chapters up later today or early Wednesday.
If you follow me, you'll see a post on my feed.
Sorry for any inconvenience.
Glad you're enjoying the book and thanks for all the votes.
Tony
@TonyHarmsworth I did reach 25 and was surprised to learn about the rewrite but am happy to wait for "Version 2" of the chapters. The story is interesting and well-paced so far. I have also enjoyed learning about Goonhilly and Cornwall, had to fire up Google Maps to see where everything was! Keep up the good work!
Hello! I'm sorry to bother you, but I wanted to reach out and ask if you would be willing to look at my work-in-progress, The Reckoning. I saw you voted on one of my chapters, thank you so much!! If you happen to have a moment to look at the new updates, I would appreciate it so much. Thank you!
@fancyfox23 Thank you so much for the votes and taking the time to look at the book. I appreciate it very much!
@fancyfox23 I'm happy to do that. Just getting started on the story, interleaved with various other things. I'm looking forward to unraveling the yarn.
Hi Dan! Thanks for all the votes on Serendipity. I hope you like the sequel as well!
@bluemoongypsy I have already started in on the sequel. I like your writing style and the way that weave your story together. You have a smooth flow of the storyline and do a good job of maintaining internal consistency of things across the chapters. Keep up the good work!
@KellyJBurke I'm finding it very interesting what you're doing with the revision to the story. You have added quite a bit of content that makes the overall story much more intriguing. Keep up the good work!
Wow, I see you powered through Earth II, thank you and what did you think.
Hi and thank you for adding your support for my story. I see you have an extensive and active discussion board here. Says something for you credibility, please let me know what you think of my story, again thanks for the votes.
@DanCoutu Thank you, I greatly appreciate your review. Yes I took some liberties with what we understand and accept as physiological and psychological limitations. But that is what makes science fiction so much fun to write. We can bend the rules of physics and science to create what should not exist and what we cannot comprehend. I hope you go on to read Earth II as I stretch even further the laws of, well ... reality. I would love to get your opinion of my story concept. This will be a trilogy, so there is a third and final installment. Again, thank you your input.
@Robert_Bennet I understand the reasoning behind making the Miorpeans large. If they were less mobile, and not translucent, then they could possibly be more woody in their makeup and that would support them being so large. But given the other aspects of their description you're probably looking at a max height of 15 to 20 feet. Still very impressive though. I thought the story was well written and well conceived. There are some typos in there that you'd want to polish up if you wish to publish but otherwise I think you have a winner.
@DanCoutu You bring up an interesting and very valid point on the giant size of my alien Miorpeans. The story plot relies on the human propensity to worship that which is unexplainable or "wondrous." The Miorpeans, Mira, had to of that nature. Recognizing that the giant Sequoia is one of the largest living organisms on Earth I created the Miorpeans as giant, intelligent plant like beings. I added luminosity and psychic abilities to enhance their deifical persona.
