Haiiii This is Khalyyyyy ♡♡
I'n not a professional writer but here are some if my thoughts about your story "Leaving You". First po,yung part name po niya na "Her POV" etc, I think it would be better if "Chapter 1" etc nalang po siya then put the POV names nalang po sa baba.
Next po is the usage of "Fast Forward". Sa tingin ko po (just my opinion) mas better po if specific time (ex: 5 Months Later,A year later) yung ilalagay mo po imbis na "Fast Forward". I think mas maganda po siyang pakinggan.
Last po, yung "*~*~*" dapat po nasa gitna po ito then naka bold.
Again po,I'm not a professional writer but I think those could help you. Thanks for reading these and I hope it could help!!
Lovelots♡♡♡