Kyla Day

Hey guys, long time no see! So sorry for being absent for so long— there's really no excuse for it besides life getting in the way. I'm looking into starting to rewrite That Winter. And by rewrite I mean REWRITE that sucker. The plot will likely be totally different and the characters as well. 
          
          I feel like I've matured as a writer and I want to start writing again since I do truly love it. I pinky promise I'm going to get a new chapter up asap. Leave some love if any of you think this is a good idea, assuming you guys still remember me. 
          
          Thanks Loves!

Hello Kayla~~I came across you in the TeenFic Club section.  I like what you're doing with "That Winter". You have a good narrative voice and eye for detail. I feel what your story needs to get more readers returning to it is some good old fashioned sexxual tension brewing beneath the surface. 
          Let's not forget your readers are 90% female age between 14-44, and hormonally curious--just like you, right? They use fiction as a secret outlet for their passions and fantasies--so let's not disappoint them. Give them what they're looking for, chapter after chapter. 
          
          As we girls know, the anticipation of sexx and romance is almost as powerful as getting it--correct? So always tease your teen and YA readers into the next chapter for more. What your story seems to lack is the inner feelings (and pulsing desires) of your characters, expressed to the reader more explicitly (but not necessarily overly graphically). 
          I'm sending you a book of mine  to demonstrate this. Trust me it's helped a lot of budding writers get more reads and votes on Wattpad. 
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/73057438-that-sultry-summer     
          Feel free to message me anytime for more help or encouragement.
          ~~Califia