It's been a while but going through the story I just couldn't help but think how much better this story could be if I rewrote it, I dislike the way I initially approached some subjects and described the setting characters and other minor/major details in the story.
Also the unholy disuse of spacing damn, it atrocious. I want to completely rewrite this story keeping the same plot but fixing the many mistakes younger me made and using correct trigger warnings in each chapter to avoid any possible issues when reading the story.
Would you all enjoy a rewrite of this story? I may rewrite it for my own enjoyment but would love some feedback! Here's an idea of the style j would attempt to rewrite this story in.
3rd POV
To others it seemed like a dance, ethereal as if you were being controlled by an unwavering force. Almost as if foggy clouds encased a small city from all edges rendering anyone who was unlucky enough to be outside, blind. It was almost suffocating to watch, your breath being snatched from your lungs to be used like fuel for a deadly poison. Unfocused eyes nearly completely closed, they were unneeded in this moment as Lance struck every bot before it could even come close to harming him.
No armour meant more danger, he liked the thrill, loved it even. Loved the feeling of complete control of his movements, no restricting suits. This dance wasn't to music, no. It seemed like it was made for war, a blinding force with no end. It was a choreographed battle cry, stemming from the heart of a true unyielding warrior. A true paladin.
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I hope the edits I have made make the story more enjoyable and less stressful for those who have read this far and I am deeply sorry that my mistakes weren't corrected earlier.
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