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6. Phoenix Ascending

Book Name: Phoenix Ascending
Author: 
Number of Chapters: 17
Genre: Fantasy

Reviewer: Disha_2007 (Admin)

REVIEW

FULL MARKS OBTAINED: 70.5/80

1. A Good Plot- 9/10

"We all wake up for someone else, live for others, smile at others, put on an act for others, but it's all for nothing."

You had me there. The plot is so interesting and this is most probably an academy fantasy novel and it's honestly so good! With an extremely powerful starting which might bring out just the right emotions you need to hit your readers with, the entire plot goes on smoothly and it's as if you didn't spare any effort and creativity whilst at writing it! The theme of the book has been skillfully handled, the mystery staying with just the right amount of humor. It's neither dark nor too light- it has just the right amount of suspense sprinkled on it to make the readers stick around. And the little quotes at the beginning of each chapter are splendid.

2. Grammar- 4/5

I'll give it a four because there are places you need to add the punctuation marks in the right way. And just so you know, you should never use multiple full stops in between to indicate a pause. It's one of the most disappointing things I've noticed in books on Wattpad- and there's a certain way you can make it sound just right! For example, look at this-

"I....This is...this is so mysterious." I said.

Can be written to as:-

"I-" My voice was stuck in my throat, and I felt the air around us choking me mercilessly, "This is," I paused for breath once again, "This is so mysterious."

See how the same line can be made to sound much better and descriptive? Yep. That's how you should do it. Also, your vocabulary is commendable! Just work on those little punctuation marks. You know, punctuation could save lives. Wanna see how? Regardless of your answer, I'll show you how anyway.

"Let's eat children."

"Let's eat, children."

Use a comma, save a life. ;)

3. Vocabulary: 5/5

Your vocabulary is cool and all. I didn't find an issue with your vocabulary- there's just the right amount of descriptive parts and just the right amount of dialogues (unlike my shitty way of writing where there is more description than dialogues. Until recently, anway.)

4. Book Title: 5/5

The book title is honestly very interesting and gives just the right idea of the book. The reader struggles to wrap his mind around the book and that ignites his/her curiosity, making them want to stick around. Phoenix Ascending drew me in with its layered history, focused plot, terrific backstory, and a well-developed set of characters.

"Monsters are made, not born."

It's just a suggestion, but this line hit me pretty hard; you can make it the logline of your book.

5. Interaction: 5/5

Your interaction is okay- keep it up. The more you respond to your readers and discuss strong points with them, the more drawn they will be to the book. You have quite a number of loyal readers- try not to lose them between the vast world of Wattpad. To maintain more interaction and make them stick around, keep mentioning them in the last note of every chapter and thank them for their support from time to time. It helps.