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➞ COVER : 7/10
Your present cover is decent, simple and sweet but it looks a little dull. No offence, but I think you should at least colour them up. You don't need to change it but just brighten the colours. The illustrations are done beautifully and the concept is amazing too but just light up the colours.
➞ TITLE : 10/10
I don't think anything is more Wilder than Wilder. I love the title. I like that you kept it modest and didn't make any complications with it. Honestly, after reading your book, I can't come up with a better name too:)
➞ BLURB : 8/10
The blurb was sufficiently balanced between both the characters. As there is more of the boy than the girl, yet, it gives a glimpse of Em. I want you to bring something to your notice,
"According to the very girl who made fun of Wilder's name, not all teen fictions need to be a romance...right?"
I didn't understand what you were trying to say or ask here. This is what Em thinks right 'not all teen fiction needs to be a romance' then what is the question mark for. Okay!!! No wait I get what you're trying to convey, but it is kinda troublesome to understand.
➞ FIRST CHAPTER : 9/10
I love the way you describe Wilder's mood and character. You've written it so naturally that it isn't hard to understand. The conversations between Wilder and Em is something unbelievable for a first meeting but I like the way it went. The phrases like "food is food" and "tasty junk" makes it fun to read.
There was some missing punctuation that I think you should take care of, other than that the first chapter is good to go.
➞ PLOT, FLOW, ORIGINALITY : 14/15
Honestly, I haven't read anything like this before. Like, I'm a teen fiction sucker but this was a little different with the same plot. The way that you have focused on both MC's life is perfect. The flow of your story is excellent too, there was no difficulty in the flow and everything was totally understandable.
➞ CHARACTER AND SETTING DEVELOPMENT: 13/15
Your characters are amazing, relatable (not to me tho, they relate to me very few but they do) and fun. The mingling of Wilder and Mason or Em and Rose, the way they fight or ignore each other. The way you describe Aunt Claire and the development of each of your characters is incredible. Everything looks a lot easy but I can understand how hard it is for you.
➞ GRAMMAR, SPELLING AND VOCABULARY : 14/15
There were places where a lot of commas were used and someplace there were none, other than this I don't think I found any problem with your grammar. As per your vocabulary, you used the word "insurmountable". After reading this I just went, "huh! what??", Umm...so I just wanna say it will not be people who are fluent in English.
➞ READERS ENJOYMENT : 13/15
I really enjoy the whole concept of your book and Update is as fast as you can bro, I wanna read more. I love Em's sass. It's not like I can relate to your characters but I can understand them, I can imagine them. This is the first time ever I imagined Lucky Blue Smith and I kinda liked it.
➞ OTHER COMMENTS
You did a really good job with everything that comprises your book and story. Everyone has their own way and personality. I admire the way you named all the chapters. Thank you for giving me the chance to read your book and sorry if I offended you in some way, but, everything written is my thoughts on your book :) All the best for the rest of your book<3
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