Jeneisha's Book Reviews (CLOSED)

12. Book Of You & I

Author: bookofawriter

Title 5/5

Love, love, love. It intrigued me and had me wondering what the book might've been about.

Cover 4/5

I love the picture, however, I think you could've chosen something different. 

Description 9/10

The description doesn't reveal too much information. There are also a few errors that could be fixed. 

Character Development 6/10

Thanks to the character aesthetic at the beginning of the book, I somewhat had some ideas how the characters look etc. There wasn't much of that in the writing so include them.

Spelling and Grammar 8/10

Not perfect, but great nonetheless. There are a few punctuation errors such as missing punctuation marks or some that are incorrectly used. Those can also be fixed by simply reading over.

Plot 5/10

I like where the plot is going, but I still think it's a little rushed. 

Overall Review 

You're doing a great job so far, keep up the good work. I love the aesthetics as well as the quotes and images you include in each chapter. Keep writing and you'll get better with time.

Reviewer 

Hiz_Secret_Addiction

***

Title  5/5

I like the title. Simple and you effortlessly told everyone what the book is about.

Cover  3/5

The cover really expressed what the book is about and matches well with the description. 

Description 4/10

Since it's not a normal world, you have to work on what to do because people would imagine a normal world (no one can stress their imagination unless you stress it). Write about things that changed. Also, some parts, I got really confused; the part about making of an illusion. You are supposed to explain what they are made of and describe them very well. And I was also thinking, it's fake, how can you touch and hug an illusion?

Character Development 4/10

I already pointed it out, you need to describe your characters. Not only physically but their emotions as well.

Spelling and Grammar 10/10

Plot 4/10

Since the book is a continuation and I didn't really read the first part, I don't really know how to connect the dots. Just because it's a book 2 doesn't mean you mustn't explain some things again, if it's necessary to do so. 

Overall Review 

The book is impressive, but don't let people read your book because its promoting LGBTQ, but let people read it because they can't stop. That's the thing about that genre, it attracts readers and you'll be thinking the book is awesome not knowing everyone just wants to read about girls kissing girls. Don't lose focus! LGBTQ is a theme, magic is a theme... add other themes. 

I liked what you did with Amity and Brix but personally, I don't really see it as a serious tension that can lead to the climax in your story. When people write love stories like yours, they always involve a third party. But the question is, what would you do with a third party??

Reviewer 

Bunmi757