Title is one of those things which attracts the readers the most. This basically gives us the vibes of the theme of the story. First of all, your title seems too long. I don't think it is related to the story as well. I haven't seen its relevance to the plot and storyline. I didnt get its meaning and purpose behind using this phrase as why you used (Black prince and white princess). Title is one of those basic things which catches the reader's attention and plays an important role to make readers interested in reading the book. Even though this title is unique, it is not catchy enough nor is it relevant to the story.
You should name it after the story line and according to the theme. Instead of using the current phrase, I would like to suggest you a few names, Except it depends on you to change.
His princess
Lost Eden and princess
Hidden obsession
Cover: ⅕
It's only a picture and text. No creativity is found and I see no effort being put on this factor. The creativity level is too low. You should work on the cover. It doesn't catch the reader's attention at all. Of course, complexity doesn't matter but relevance matters and I think vovr is relevant to the theme of the story you portrayed. But still, it is not catchy enough. I might miss the story if I scroll down via many.
To make it stand out you can either design the cover yourself or order a cover from any graphic shop who makes good covers.
The cover can have any female idol from kpop or you can have a silhouette of a girl with tae's dark theme photos as a face claim.
Blurb: 4/10
Writing dialogues is not bad but a good thing to catch reader's attention but revealing the characters' names, you should write only dialogues. Or a context without any name revealed. It kills the suspense and thrill of a reader. After this if you are gonna write the dialogues, then write them with a space between them. They all felt like they were from one scene. You shouldn't give us all the dialogues, meaning you put one from the beginning then from the middle and then from the end of the story.
I don't find it interesting. The blurb is not catchy and the dialogue you used doesn't give off exciting and thrilling vibes.
There is also no phase among paragraphs so let us know that the scenes are from different parts of the story. The first paragraph is not interesting and boring as well. You can either remove it or put it down. Same as the second one. But the fourth paragraph where a person is telling him to stay away from her can spike the reader's attention.
