Title: 3/5 The title is not perfect for the story. It's relevance to the story is unbalanced and barely makes any interaction and attachment to the book. Basically, title suits the story barely at some points, not the whole book. It is not a justice to this beautiful story. I would suggest you change the name and keep something attracting, pleasing and relates to the story line.
Cover: 2/10 To be honest, cover is neither the attractive and catchy, nor it is related to the story. It is not matching the vibes of the book and giving interesting vibes. It is blend and not catchy enough to grab reader's attention. The font style and color is mingling together with the background. The font is too cursive and is difficult to read at once.
I would suggest you change the cover. Drop an order for your book cover in our graphic shop and get amazing graphics.
Blurb: 5/10 Your blurb is not good enough. This is not called a perfect blurb if we measure it according to the rules and prescription told for the description of the book. This factor is not interesting at all, it didnt give me exciting vibes or made me curious to know more and more. The blurb is void of any plot description and not giving the reader any idea about what's the plot, theme and story line.
You can make it more interesting by adding a few scenes or events from the book. The dialogues written at the bottom can be written at the top to make it look good and the paragraph can be a bit shorten. Add a little interesting scene from the book. It will make the blurb perfect and eye catching.
First impression: 2/5 If we count it after reading blurb, title and seeing cover, it was not good. The blurb attracted me a bit and I started the first chapter. But the introduction you have given for the characters, I don't think its necessary. The whole character used in story, can't be told and described in just a few lines. I think, their personalities, names, characters and behaviors must be explored via reading the story.
It is unjust to the book and doesn't imply good impression.
Plot: 16/20 The plot is unique one and good. As far as it interesting and have the capability to keep the readers merge in them, it is not executed well. I have read this book from the every start till the las test update of yesterday.
The plot is not cliche and have many elements and twists which is distinguishing it from others but what made me awkward was the execution and the pace. In the beginning the pace was unbalanced and everything was happening so fast. The execution was not well balanced and many scenes and events were mingling together. What I meant to say is, the events, the happenings were not described in enough details.
They could make a reader feel confusion and awkwardness. But as I mentioned above, I have read it from the very start and have been reading it as soon as you update, I have noticed that you have improved much.
Now, from the middle of the book, you are improved and getting much better day by day. The execution of the plot is well balanced now and the events, scenes, emotions and characters are all explained in details.
There are still a few mistakes and hole in the plot in the latest chapters such as ending the virginity of the omegas, why did the demon alpha called Taehyung and others, also the reason why jungkook hates Hoseok and Yoongi is not unveiled properly.
Flow:6/10 As I have said before, the flow was unbalanced and undisturbed at the start of the book. But now, in the latest chapters, all of the scenes and event happenings are in flow and well executed. Even though there are still a few scenes which I think could be replaced or be much more better but as it is your story, its your choice how, when and what event should take place.
Grammar/vocabulary: 7/10 You are not bad with grammar. You have a good grip on the tense usage. But at some points, you did mistakes in punctuations. There were plenty of the errors in punctuations. Missing full stops, overused and misusage of commas and relating phrases as well.
You have used many words and phrases again and again. Such as "Alpha, Omega" which I think not only disturbs the normal flow but also annoys the reader. Hope you can edit them.
Emotions: 7/10 At first, I wanted to quite. When I first started reading this book a long ago, before you dropped it for the review. I was hesitant and not interested in going on. The beginning chapters till the middle or even last half of the book are well balanced and poorly executed. But then I said, "No, let's read and find out what happened to Taehyung and how did jungkook find and would react to the news, Taehyung being his mate".
But as the book moved forward and you brought more events, more characters, started to work on their description and focusing in their emotions, made it really pretty and good.
Character's development: 8/10 It is shown briefly. Not at all of a sudden, but a slow burn instead. The flow and execution affects the characters, their behavior and story development along with the character's. But as I have mentioned before, you have improved a lot through out this journey. The development was seen and even excited well. All the characters were described briefly and had been contented to the story.
Writing style: 8/10 Your writing style has improved a lot. At first, it was abrupt and confusing. The writing style is the thing which distinguish you from other. It makes you stand out and gives you your own identity as a writer. Writing style also affects the plot and story line.
This is the one, which makes even the cliche and overused story line a unique one and interesting but it is also the one which makes the unique and good story line go all in vein.
Your style has improved a lot and is getting much better then before.
Overall: 4/5 I have enjoyed this book and I am still enjoying it. This gave me a good time and turned the boring time of my day into a good one. Well done. Hope you will work on the factors I have mentioned above and will take all the words positively.
Enjoyment: 4/5
Total: 72/100
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Hope you will take all the words and marks into consideration and will improve yourself.
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