The ARMY Awards 2022 [JUDGING]

Elimination #1

There were a total of 17 books in this category so this first elimination will consist of 5 books while the others will have fewer.

Reviews are only here to help you. Writers that talk down on the eliminated books and their authors will be considered for disqualification, do not talk down to the writers.

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1: Destiny, was it? by Rexaaa9

Total: 44/100

Review: My first impressions of this book were amazing! Within the first few chapters the action was wild (in a good way) and there was a good shock value. Unfortunately, I think the really strong beginning led to the pacing feeling off throughout the rest of the book so far. I'm having trouble connecting with the characters on an emotional level and would like to see more depth. There's a lot of back and forth where the characters quickly switch from a moment where they finally kissed, to for unknown reasons questioning whether the other likes them or straight to anger. I think the repetitiveness of this back and forth leaves the plot feeling a little dull, but I plan to keep reading with hopes that the author will return to some of that intensity from the beginning. The grammar and structure of the book could use some fine tuning as well.

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2: Demon's Forbidden Love by zoshlovesbts

Total: 45/100

Review: Hello! Admin here! Okay, I'm just gonna go right into it, the grammar was atrocious and I couldn't even figure out what was going on because of it. I had to stop reading the book at the 3rd chapter because I was utterly confused about what you were trying to say. Because of this, the other scores went down as well. I couldn't get a clear theme or concept and it all seemed so rushed, almost like word vomit was on the page, everything out there all at once with no coherency. I think with some heavy editing and some changes to how you describe your characters, this could have the potential to be a very good book. Please do not keep writing and please keep this in mind if you do end up editing it. This is not to bring you down in any way, just to help you with your future endeavors.

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3: Designed for You by moonbirds6854 

Total: 49/100

Review: Hello! Admin here! I like your creativity and I wished that it would have been written in a way that would clearly define what the story was supposed to be about. There were many grammatical errors that I couldn't seem to get around, words in places that they shouldn't be, and sentences not having the correct syntax to make them flow nicely. The way that it was written like a script was something that I advise never to do, you can't get a character's true personality if you write it in script form and then place the way they are supposed to say it after they've already spoken the line, does that make sense? Because of the lack of background in the story, I was unable to understand what was going on half of the time but from the parts that I could put together, it has the makings of a very cute story. I think that with some editing and some changes to the way the dialogue is written it would have the potential to be a very nice book that I would definitely read again. Please don't stop writing! This is only meant to help you, not bring you down. I hope I was helpful.

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4: Always With You by Seong_Grace

Total: 50/100

Review: While I think the premise and plot of the book is interesting, there are some things that could use some work to make things flow better. Much of the book seems to focus heavily on other aspects of the plot, making the love story with Taehyung feel like a part of the background. I would love to see the main character's develop a little more past the damsel in distress trope. Since the story isn't complete I'm looking forward to hopefully seeing the relationships start to feel a little more real. There's a lot that's going on with the plot as far as the main character moving in with a new family with the other members of BTS as her new brothers, plus military and mafia-ish themes. With so much happening I think the connection to the emotion of the story was a little difficult so far.

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5: Burning Rose by Bangtan_Sonyeo_

Total: 63/100

Review: This story has good bones, but there are a couple of central things that have gotten in the way of me truly connecting with the story. I love so many aspects of the plot and the entire premise of the Blood Season. The author seems pretty skilled as far as the technicalities of writing, but with such extensively long chapters, other essential aspects of the story lose it's appeal. The length of the chapters seems to be due to a lot of sometimes repetitive inner dialogue by the main character. I think the emotion of the story would come through better if the inner dialogue was scaled back a bit. I can see that the author wants to be descriptive about the main character's experiences and emotions, which is wonderful thing for a story, but the drawn out inner dialogue can make it difficult to connect with the emotion of the story, see the main character as likable, and creates a pacing that's too slow. I will finish reading this story since I'm looking forward to the plot coming to life more and am enjoying the storyline.

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