REVIEW: This book was very interesting and it fits the genre perfectly. It was fascinating to see that the lead female character could control things with her mind. And I enjoyed the scene where she was captured by captain Packlightly. The characters are very interesting and cool. And I found the captain's name amusing. My only issue was the Blurb. It needs to be edited and properly punctuated. Try making it less lengthy. I found grammatical errors where you use the word were instead of was. (It looked as though he were counting before giving a dismissive shrug). All in all, it was a great story. Good luck.
kristoffkerry FULL REVIEW: First I'd like to congratulate you for being our third-place winner in this category. Well deserved. I remember reading part of your book when you first applied for this award and I found the plot quite intriguing. Now the Sci-Fi genre is one of my favorites next to the Act-Adventure and you did the genre justice. As for the title, I like it, it's definitely something I would get excited to read. Moving on to the blurb... I honestly didn't get much sense from it because of the overly descriptive words and the grammatical errors. I think you should rewrite the blurb, keep it short and sweet, and catchy. Now the plot is excellent and you are a very talented writer but the usage of description to me was not your best. I felt like you were telling the readers what's happening instead of showing them. Try and make your descriptions more vivid so that your readers can get a taste of your awesome imaginative mind. I agree with the judge with the grammar (for me it was the sentence constructions), they read a little too forced sometimes, and that will take away from the reader's enjoyment. But other than that you did a great job with your story. I loved it.
REVIEW: This book was written exceptionally well. The descriptions were amazingly done and I felt as if I was in every scene. Your attention to detail is extraordinary. Your Grammar and vocabulary are astounding, I did not see any errors there. Being that it was a spin-off from the little mermaid, I took away a point for originality. Even though it felt a bit like Fantasy., it was a great story.
REVIEW: This book was sooooo interesting. It felt like I was in a movie and I couldn't wait to get to the other scenes. I wasn't too impressed with the prologue, but chapter one made up for that. Your Grammar and Punctuation were great, and so was your use of literary devices. The characters are fascinating and that makes for an interesting plot. I loved this Plot the most because it was intriguing. I felt its originality and I was hooked as a reader. Good job.
kristoffkerry FULL REVIEW: Congratulations on your win, well deserved. The prologue needs a little tweaking. The MC is what, only a year old when that thing happened to her loved one (don't wanna give away spoilers), but the whole concept read confusing to me. I don't think a baby could remember all of that. Also, add a little more to the scene, the prologue was only a few short paragraphs. Entering chapter one and I was hooked. I felt like a teenager again, the whole scene was well thought out and well executed. From the dialects to the action scene with the robotic spider(spyware). I could see every picture you painted in my mind. Your description was there but they weren't awesome, like the scene where the fat lady called the government on the MCs I thought It read a little flat, don't get me wrong, it was still entertaining but as a judge, I think you could have gone a little bit further there. But overall, you did a marvelous job. I loved your book.
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