Banana Awards 2022

🍌🎖VAMPIRE RESULTS🎖🍌

CONGRATULATIONS TO YOU ALL. EVERYONE IS A WINNER IN MY BOOK.

I'D LIKE TO SAY A BIG THANK YOU TO OUR WONDERFUL JUDGE FionaCakes91 SHE ENJOYED ALL YOUR STORIES AND THESE WERE THE FIRST RESULTS THAT WAS SENT IN BY A JUDGE.
Now, the results;

🎖HONORARY MENTION
SUCK ME MR VAMPIRE kittykattykk9

GENRE: 3/5
Even though there was mention of a vampire in chapter 4, I still didn't see this as a vampire book, maybe Humor or Young Adult/Drama. But then again, the book only consists of 6 chapters so maybe as the writer updates, we will get to see more of the sexy mysterious vampire.

TITLE: 5/5
Call me a dirty girl, but for me, I see a title with the word 'suck', and Fifi is sold. But honestly, the title matches the blurb perfectly and at least it gives potential readers some idea of what they'll be getting. So if you're not into sadistic, vampiric sex, then this book is not for you. Plus I like the play on words, like what exactly does she want Mr. Vampire to suck on - her neck or 🥝?

BLURB: 4/5
The blurb is nice and it piqued my interest enough for me to want to read the book. Just fix a few grammar errors and minor typos.

FIRST CHAPTER/PROLOGUE: 5/10
Now, baby girl, the prologue has potential, but you have to be willing to put in the work. This isn't the first time I've read this book and it isn't the first time I'm telling you it needs heavy editing.

I see where you wanted to go with the prologue. You wanted to give us the readers a glimpse into Kimberly's abusive past. The pointers were there but the explanation was not. I felt disgusted with the way you portrayed Roy and I think he has the potential of being a decent antagonist. But the prologue is too short and rushed, it didn't give me any details about any of the events that took place. It started with Kimberly's mother dying from an overdose and how much she despised her. Then you added the part where Kim's stepfather Roy moved in and started molesting her when she was 11 then all of a sudden 19-year-old Kim is biting off Roy's dick and fleeing for her life. So 9 years of Kimberly's life were crammed into a 500 words or less prologue.

And another thing that needs revision is this part down below, I think it should be rewritten with a little more description so the readers can relate to the MC more.