Okay, I got my friend to read over all I have written so far and she fixed up a few errors for me so thanks and for that I dedicate this to her. It is still the same by the way just grammar and stuff was edited.
So for people who didn't read the first time, I was babbling on about how this is my first book. It is, so PRETTY PLEASE give me feedback by fanning/voting/private messaging and commenting. Even if its mean I still want to hear it. I will stop blabbing on now..
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Prologue
As I drive home, I watch the landscape change from city sky-scrapers to closely packed town houses and office buildings into the factory blocks. I drive through this area every day and there is always one factory that stands out. All the others are modern-looking, well-kept buildings however this one, it has its own ominous aura, which subconsciously keeps people away. It is smaller than the others, abandoned, broken down, and falling apart. I pull over and step out of the car to take a closer look. I didn't know what had come over me but now my feet were moving and before I know it I am standing in front of the door. I am about to open the door and step inside when I hear a muffled voice....
Silently hoping the door wouldn't creak, I opened it so I could see in. There is nothing except a dark corridor, but further down there is a door, left ajar, and from it came the sound of a deep voice and a girl.. whimpering? I walk slowly, making no sound as I reach the door. I leaned forward to reveal something I never wanted to see.
Inside, there was a man, dressed in all black standing over something on the floor infront of a dark opening, which I assumed would be the stairs to a basement. That feeling in the pit of my stomach is telling me to get the hell out of here, but once he took a step to the side, I realised it wasn't something he was standing over, it was someone.
It was a girl, my age, lying on the floor propped up against wall, covered in blood that was easily seen on her small white dress. She had black hair, long black hair that completely covered her face and as the the man yet again blocked my view by leaning over her weakening body, he whispered some incomprehensible words into her ear.
In the time that it took my eyelids to blink, his hands were already at her neck. It was then that my eyes fell on something that I hadn't noticed before - Black tape wound around her arms and chest, there to cut off her circulation and force the last drops of blood from the lacerations along her arms that had to be from the man who was now wielding a blood-covered knife.
The girl's body was was going limp and as she slid further down the wall I noticed it, the deep, gash along the side of her neck.
He was a muderer.
I was breathing heavily now, my lungs being compressed by own emotions. I leaned forward in order to get a better look but instead I pushed the door so hard it swung wide open with a loud, ear-piercing squeak. He kicked the girls body through the opening and snapped around to face me. He raised his head to glare up at me. His unnaturally red-brown eyes the only thing that could be seen through his mask. His menacing gaze held mine. I tried to tear my eyes from his, but then something entered my mind, rummaging through my thoughts. It was like someone had jabbed there hand into my mind and stirred around until I couldn’t think clearly. That, and the pain. It pierced my skull. I grasped my head, tangling my fingers into my hair as I began to slowly crumple towards the floor. Then... the pain stopped.
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a huge thanx to http://www.wattpad.com/user/xXangelswilltakemeXx who gave me some really helpful advice and re-wrote the last few lines for me. people who can be bothered reading this should read her stories!! they are a lot more interesting than my inssessant blabber, which you are still reading, why?
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thnx for reading hope you guys liked it!! plz vote/fan/comment i love feedback and i want feedback so i can get a better idea of what to write next!!! xoxo
