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Plot & Pacing 7/10 Your chapter did flow very well from one another and the dialogue smoothly ran (most of the time). Although, I don't know, I felt it was a tiny bit fast-paced and the plot thickened very quickly. Maybe we could get to know the character's hope for the future as well as their backgrounds?
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Characters 10/10 All the characters are very unique and I love seeing how they interact with each other, since each one has a different personality and they contrast against each other. Especially Elle, I love her POV and her views on everything.
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Description 10/10 You have some wonderful descriptions throughout the book. You really let the story flow well and the descriptive paragraphs helped make the story less choppy. The first paragraph in the first chapter really got to me. I could practically feel Elle's pain, and her memories were really vivid and real.
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Book cover 5/5 I think the cover has a sense of mystery and I do love the people on it and how they are positioned.
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Title 4/5 I do like the title and how it gives off a sense of what the book may be about. Although it just kind of seems a bit basic, in my opinion.
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Blurb 4/5 The blurb is very good and sums up the main point of the story. Although, in the last sentence, you wrote, "Cause remember the monster in disguise can be anyone." Instead, if it were to be proper grammar you would want to change cause to because. If you want to keep it that way, you should put an apostrophe before the word, so it's like this: 'Cause.
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Grammar & Vocabulary 6/10 There were a few things I wanted to address for this section. Sometimes, in your dialogue, you didn't exactly write it properly. For example, you'll have a piece of dialogue written like this: "Ara, stop annoying him." Suggested the head. The thing that's wrong is that first, you should have a comma instead of a period. Second, you should always have the word right after the dialogue uncapitalized. So instead, you could change it to, "Ara, stop annoying him," suggested the head. For some chapters, you've clumped all the paragraphs into one, which is fine but it kind of makes it look a little sloppy. Instead, you could space them all off. The nice thing about Wattpad is you don't have to indent it, just press "return/enter" and you'll have a new paragraph!
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My enjoyment 7/10 I did enjoy the book, and I think it had a wonderful sense of mystery and paranormal vibes. Although, even though it's a wonderful book, it's not my favorite.
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What to improve on: Just look over the grammar section and see what you can do to improve.
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