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Plot & Pacing 7/10 I've noticed your story is mostly made up of dialogue near the start, which can give a rushed sense and makes me kind of not want to read it anymore, although near the end you started to add more detail. As the plot thickens, I can tell you're trying to keep it going at a reasonable pace, which is working.
Description 8/10 As I said, near the start you don't have a lot of description, but near the end it really explains their feelings. One thing you could do it describe their surroundings and appearances more to really paint a picture in the reader's mind.
Book cover 5/5 The cover was very interesting, with the font choices and the person on front. I do like it, though, and I feel like it relates to the story well.
Title 4/5 I don't know, to me the title seemed a little basic but it does relate well to the book.
Blurb 3/5 Honestly, I'm not sure if I would really call your blurb a true blurb. You see, a blurb is a quick summary of the story to try and attract the readers. Yours is just a piece of dialogue. You can keep it, in fact many blurbs include bits of the story but I think to really draw the readers in, you need to do a quick summary. I get it, that summaries are very hard to write, but you can always ask for help when writing a blurb!
Grammar & Vocabulary 3/10 Sometimes your punctuation isn't the best. For example, your period will be a space away from the words. Remember to fix that. Also, for your dialogue, you always just have a comma/question mark/exclamation mark before the quotation mark. For example, a sentence should look like this, "Poor teacher," she mumbled. Also remember to keep the correct tense. Your story is in the past tense, so all the words should be in the past tense, for example "cried" instead of "cry." Sometimes you went a little into the present tense, so maybe just proofread and correct all these mistakes.
My enjoyment 6/10 It was alright, a very quick read that had an alright plot. Although it wasn't my favourite, but keep writing!
Extra notes: I highly suggest proofreading your book and correcting all the grammar mistakes I mentioned, and adding some more description near the start.
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