You may think that this name is a joke but it is NOT so here is a picture of what we are working with
I know very...erm beautiful lets say... now ON WITH THE RE-DO!
First we needed to change her story and other.....traits so first is the things that are just edge no point,
First NO DATING SANS no offence i've never been in the undertale fandom but 1. isnt this OC a teen AKA a minor AKA a CHILD?1!1?1? And 2. Sans probably wouldn't date anyone if we are all being honest with ourselves not to mention no where does this say its an undertale oc, nor does it look like one so its just silly so we WILL be getting rid of that sowwy!
Next problem, she can't be perfect because its sadly impossible ):[ But she can be a PERFECTionist because that gives her more personality then just 'perfect'
Time for the next thing which isnt a problem but i dont get which is she likes pink (thats the ok part) but because its 'edgy' (thats straight lies —__—) pink is known to be a girly colour and that is fine you can be edgy, a tomboy or anything and still like pink and still dress pink!
Now their is crying blood....now i have experience with coloured tears from black to red to blue now while crying blood is really weird and does NOT have an explanation in this sense i do believe their a thing in real life were your eyes can bleed but we are NOT going there today so as a replacement she can have black mascara so when she cries its black
And i dont see a problem with the sighing it can just be a bad habit and fill in the need for a catchphrase
Oh and yeah, her cats a ghost cat now and she's a grip reaper bc she HAD to keep the edgyness and i was NOT letting her cat DIE
But i will have too BLAST her with the girlpower ray(which just means i dressed her more kool instead of her being in a normal grip reaper)And.....HERE SHE IS!!! :3
She was a more simple one so it wasn't that hard
oh, and comment a new name since i dont think 'Edgy Teengirl' is the most....human name if we are being honest
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Q: whats your opinion on marysues?
YOU ARE READING
Mary-sue rehabilitation/redesign
RandomTo learn what a marysue is I have another book to explain it!! Rehab for marysues AND antisues to be beautiful and amazing OCs!!!(btw i will only do mary sues that are JOKE marysues that are genuine will NOT get in this book)