Hello this is the writer, I unpublished my works, why because one of the people from Tumblr but they still like it!
"However, the structure of your story could use some work. Before reading, visually your work is just a solid block of text. Stories like these are difficult to read especially, if quotation marks and dialogue are placed in the middle of it. I liked that you italicized and underlined your dialogue to differentiate it from the rest of the story. I suggest cutting your story into paragraphs to make it smoother for the reader."
"For understandability, as I mentioned earlier is organizing your dialogue. It was confusing when two or more characters were in a scene and I had to figure out who was speaking."
-Waterfallwonders from Tumblr
So I will make a change for you readers to read easily and not have to figure it out, thank you for your time, and I promise I'll put it back up when I'm finished!
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Another Universe
Viễn tưởngThis is about Thomas and also the Universe Thomas. They swap places without any of them knowing for unknown reasons, and they both want to go back to their universe, Universe Lady said to Thomas it happens but not so often when gold dust is very ran...
